Two sides & one story

There it is

A light blue sea

That stretches miles away from the shore

Not knowing where it exactly it starts or ends

You smile because for once you feel a sense of relaxation and joy

I want to give you everything my dear

Because I get everything in return

The sun plays peak-a-boo

With the clouds that don't really know what they want

You know it won't rain because this day is perfect

You look back and see your life long partner walking towards you

Baby girl wrapped around him looking as if she had just woke up

Baby boy running to his momma arms wide open knowing momma will catch him

And before I know he has leaped into my arms

Husband laying a quick kiss as if, IF fast enough the kids won't notice

We all look over the ocean

And nothing could be more perfect

There it is

A light blue sea

That stretches miles away from the shore

But whats that

Its not joy I feel 

Its disgust 

Disgust at the sight, and mad at the world

The sun is covered by this dark cloud that in seconds begins to light up the sky

In a way that sends shivers down your spine

Fears in your mind and makes even the Gods angry and scream

I close my eyes knowing I've caught the eye of the storm 

And try to picture the beauty I once had, or imagined I had

I almost hear the steps behind me and before I knew it

I jolted my eyes open and turned around

Turned around to nothing but a house starring back at me

To nothing but the clouds telling me to take shelter

The waves kissing my toes telling me if I stay eventually they will over power me 

And as I walk back in this dirty circumstance I can't help but cry

But I can't help but turn back

Looking at the Ocean

And realizing nothing is perfect 

Author's Note

I understand this is in the format of a poem, resembles more of a story but please give me feedback on the content! thank you

Reviews

[Rico]

This poem is very inspiring. it reminds me of moments that used to be happy memories, but over time those same moments have become dark, and saddening moments. I enjoyed the first part, but the second part really grabbed my attention. I like the unique format as well.

[Schatzi]

I not only like the way you start and finish them the same, but I enjoy how much they diverge and yet, say essentially the same thing. I like the aesthetics as well.

[Irenic]

how situation changes in seconds or in years, this is what you have said beautifully in few lines which made me t write a review.
The poem is very smooth and smoothly acknowledge us with the difference between dreams and reality.
Love your poem.
Thanks for sharing with all of us:)

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSh..]

Anonymous, this piece has touch my emotions. It has brought tears. That which is, that which was and that which will never be. You have revealed this perfectly. I am in awe, you rock.

Sheer Terror

[I Am Svetlana]

"I close my eyes knowing I've caught the eye of the storm
And try to picture the beauty I once had, or imagined I had"

These were the most powerful lines that I read here. It is often sad to know that nothing in this world is able to be perfect, but who said life would be? Life is meant to give you a challenge, a chance for you to fight for what you want, who you want in life. It's okay if things don't turn out the way you expect them to every time. I feel that's the beauty of it...every day is a chance to start over. A chance for you to have a different, possibly better day than the one before. Everything doesn't have to be perfect and nor should you try to rush everything in order for them to get achieved. Life takes time...but it's up to yourself to be patient and take that time to improve whatever feels most broken.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is true. The sea so damn beautiful and so powerful/dangerous. I liked the opposing thoughts in the poetry. I believe. Respect the sea and know how to swim. The ocean is a kind friend. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Hebe]

Hi Nony, Very novel way you potray this poem, I really liked it.....there's always two sides to everything in life and it really comes across effectively.... I felt warm & fuzzy one moment..then it suddenly changed to concern....good job!

[Bala Gorthi]

The idea and its presentation are interesting.
The first section gives a happy picture. But the second section puts us in confusion, is it of two different time elements or of two different perspectives or the first one is imagination and the other one is reality.
Your idea of using the words two sides in the title and presenting the write in two sides, from two angles is interesting.
I enjoyed reading this..
Thanks for sharing

[Valentine]

Two sides One story. This left me thinking are the two a couple? One mate happy and the other miserable? Like the first part best. Valentine

[D Connolly]

Just note: "disgust" is spelled wrong in 2nd part
I love the way 2 different people can have different perspectives while seeing the same thing. The only thing that confused me, is that the two parts are describing different weather, so I don't know if it's 2 different times of day, or two different places. To go along with the title of "Two Sides, One Story", I think each part should be told from the couple. The first is obviously happy, the sun is shining, and the kids are there, and it's wonderful. The 2nd part could be tweaked just slightly to describe the same scene, but with a vastly different outlook. Instead of beautiful shining sun, it could be glaring. Instead of a cloudless sky, it could be a blue desert. Instead of having fun carrying the baby, it could be yet another burden to carry.
I do like the idea, and I think it's very creative and a good look at how 2 people can have vastly different experiences in the same story.