Letters^

The letter came

In a glass bottle

I wondered

What it said

Who was smart enough

To send it in such a manner

But then I realized

Our love sent it

He missed me

I missed him

He wrote it 

And said

"God if we honestly miss each other

it will find a way to her, my love"

So it did

And it read

My dearest

My love

I couldn't find another way

So here it is

I missed you

I love you

I will see you soon

Reviews

[R. S.]

I love the poem; and the idea that it came in a bottle with a message that proves that they missed each other. But I felt it was hard to decode "it will find a way to her" it could be improved by replacing it with "this will find a way to her" or "this will find a way to you" depending if that message is written in the letter (meant for 'her' to read) or if he is praying to God while holding the bottle and sending it off to 'her.'

Overall I loved the poem

[barleygirl]

An interesting vignette briefly stated. I love the "glass bottle" motif, but I also find myself longing for some little distinction that makes this well-known image originally YOURS and not just an over-used symbol. I'm always encouraging others to stretch a little more when you use iconic imagery. Show me something about this bottle that we haven't seen before. A gold-encrusted cork or a label peeling off.

Aside from that little issue, the rest of your poem is well-crafted to convey a double meaning . . . sometimes an old attraction, long gone, will appear in a different & surprising form in our lives . . . the way your final message ends, it leaves many possibilities stirring in the reader's mind.

[redzone]

sweet, not many get love letter in a bottle... how do they say it, love will find a way... or something similar..

redzone

[Drama Child]

Sweet words of love! Nice read!

[XO Vee]

thank you so much

[Jibey]

A charming, romantic idea... The simplicity of the short lines and the structure add to the impact.

[XO Vee]

thank you so much

[Valentine]

I like the formation. This one sounds better when read. Valentine

[XO Vee]

thank you so much