Empty;

She once looked into your heart

Yes it was there

The love, everyone saw 

But that pain hid 

like a mouse from a cat

or a cat from a dog

She loved every minute of being in public

He looked at her with those eyes

That once convinced her to give him everything

He held her with that strength

The strength that promised to protect her from all evil

He kissed her with passion 

The passion that she never envisioned to disappear

But it did, it all did

Now a calendar hangs from her wall with every event highlighted 

Not because she loves these get togethers

She loves the thought that at them, she gets her baby back

The man she fell in love with in the beginning 

The one that shows her off 

And expresses that love for all to see 

The one who dresses to match her 

And people gaze in jealousy 

But when the clock strikes the time to go

They make their way into the car 

And silence fills the space

They enter their home 

Thats hardly a home to her

She steps into the shower 

Dries off 

And not minutes later 

He has changed back into that stranger

Attire changed and gone out the door

She's left in a home 

Thats hardly a home

Empty 

Empty the heart

Empty the soul

Empty the happiness

Just simply Empty

Reviews

[simpleminds]

Empty of love and happiness gone like an old lover's song gone like the wind on a dust bowl field promises broken never to be filled lies were told broken hearts were its resolve you vow it will never happen again your lesson learned a life of struggles and strife. It is apparent that love sometimes bites.

[XO Vee]

Oh it definitely does and it seems like you never get used to it ! But it should get a little easier

[aLittlePain]

Hello, this is emotionally charged and so intense. We do wear a facade of sorts in front of others it's a different story when we're alone. 'Empty' captures this piece perfectly the feeling is so deeply rooted. R xo

[XO Vee]

Hi, and you're right its meant to capture that and all the rest. how sometimes you can take the wrong approach for what you think is the right outcome.

[Lydia Shutter]

So sad. People where a mask when they are in social situations, but when they are behind closed doors, everything changes. The loneliness, regret, and emptiness are palpable. Lydi**

[XO Vee]

Thank you so much; I like to explore my way through my writing!

[barleygirl]

Killer intense! Nicely crafted to build up to a crescendo at the end. You're painting a glimpse of this situation that's kinda vague, so at first we aren't catching the intensity, but just following along the story being told. The details are plentiful & well-described, but not so specific that this is about a specific situation . . . it has enuf "open" structure so that any reader could pick out certain lines of familiarity. Even tho it seems the word "empty" applies to the void that this couple returns to, after the event . . . I'm seeing a lot of emptiness in the way the event is described, as well. Just a freakin' world of emptiness. I especially love the mouse to cat to dog progression -- very clever & a good metaphor.

[XO Vee]

You broke it down well , and thank you so much for the feedback!

[Chris]

Yeah... you touched it well didn't ya. Makes one catch a breath just to remember how LOUD the silence really is.

[XO Vee]

Thank you so much again! Means a lot that you are taking the time to read through the pieces.

[Chris]

THAT is how we learn about the person - behind their eyes...