My Lucky Star...

So I wrote this after we got together..

 

My Lucky Star

I watch the crimson roll down my arm,
I feel the pain,
So deep inside…

Is this real?
Or is it a dream?
Will I be hurt?
Or will this be different?

I am so tired,
Of my life,
I’m so tired
Of this pain…

But when I’m with you,
It’s ceased.

You wonder why
I always doubt,
I never trust,
I never love,

The reason why
Is because I’ve been hurt,
Time and time before,
And I don’t want that to happen,
Especially with you...

Do you really love me?
Or is this a joke?
Are you going to hurt me,
The first chance you get?

I watch the crimson roll down my arm,
And hope that you
Will be
My lucky star….

 

I wrote this after we started dating, and I was just worrying...

 

Reviews

[ms. barrie]

crimson, i don't think i need to stretch my imagination to know what that is suppose to mean :( -- anyhow

Is this real?
Or is it a dream?
Will I be hurt?
Or will this be different?

I am so tired,
Of my life,
I’m so tired
Of this pain…

But when I’m with you,
It’s ceased.

You wonder why
I always doubt,
I never trust,
I never love,

very heart-felt poem, your writings the reason i enjoy them so much, is that they make you feel rather than just read them. you are not afraid to pour everything you are feeling, your soul and just spill it on paper. for me personally, this makes the writer's poem, etc. more relatable to people, cause we have all felt this way, or feeling this way, or worrying about having to have these feelings (worries.)

those lines i copied/pasted (lazy typist), are my favorite through-out this piece. great job. :) -- along with the demons possessing me, now i am starting to get the green eyed monster too. :p

[}Echo{]

Yeah... :(

Thanks a lot. Yeah, and I've gotten to where now, I can vent with my writing insteaed of turning to like cutting... Thanks so much.

Thanks a lot. Oh, nice. :P

[ms. barrie]

yes, and crimson is very poetic, you can actually altho at first venting that feeling out, now it's written, can turn the word crimson and how you used it on that context to mean something else, if you want. yeah i have one piece called "days are black" but i never posted it because it is about severe depression and well, once again, rambling babble, and it is something that i feel too personal to share. well i just sorta shared it i suppose?

yes, keep writing, keep telling you that. even if you do not want to spend the energy into trying to put it into a poem or post it, even if you just write what you feel in a sentence or essay in your journal, just to get those feelings out.

writing = love :) and you welcome :)

[}Echo{]

Yeah... Yeah, you should post it. :)

Yeah. Yeah..

Thanks. :)

[ms. barrie]

oh lord, it's very long and cliche and blah. just wrote it cause like you i had to vent. but ty, keep writing!

[}Echo{]

Well you shuld still post it! I posted a poem about WEEED before, and I've posted poems to my best frined, that make people probablby think I'm a lesbian now! You can post this. :)

[}Echo{]

Nice.