F**k You

Just me venting my anger...

I loved you,

I cared about you,

I would’ve given the world for you,

And I thought you would, too.

 

But I was wrong,

And so were you,

You don’t give a f**k about me

And now I don't give a f**k about you. 

 

You don’t give a s**t about me,

Hell, you’d probably be happy

If I were dead,

But that’s okay,

Because I’m done,

 

And without further ado

I say,

F**K YOU

 

 

 

Author's Note

I know it's horrible and doesn't sound right, but I'm posting it anyways...

Reviews

[Not Your Typical New Yo..]

It's not horrible. What you've written is pure honest. There will be people that will use you in some way. These people are just bunch of useless a******s. No, I see your raw and anger energy through these words. And I thank you for posting this. It was a great one to read, I promise you.

[}Echo{]

Really? Yah. Yeah.. Thanks so much!!

[Sir Jaykom]

Its blunt and raw. And gets the point across nicely despite the word f**k - which most people tend to not use in their poetry. I like it for its authenticity. keep it up.

[}Echo{]

Is that a good thing...? Yeah, I know... Thanks! :)

[scripted]

F**K YOU what a clear message i thought it was a funny poem

[}Echo{]

Thanks! :)

[Damien Davison]

"And without further ado

I say,

F**K YOU"

Haha, great ending. I thought the whole thing was alright myself, thank you for sharing!

[}Echo{]

Thanks! :)

[Kyle Sky]

I respect the mood of wrath but5 i don't respect how you presented it with those two words. Still I find the poem quite good in the flow.

[}Echo{]

Um, thanks. :)

[cevance]

I think that pretty well sums it up in a nutshell.

[}Echo{]

Thanks.

[Frieda P]

Haha, can I use this? Are you kidding, it sounds perfect!

[}Echo{]

Haha, thanks! :)

[Terra]

I love how it flows! It feels right yah know? But its not horrible! Maybe a bit immature in using the f word in that kind of manner, but I love it! Total favorite!

[}Echo{]

Thanks! :)

[Terra]

No problem

[}Echo{]

:)

[Harley (arbiter)]

Woah.............. woah...... I wrote a poem with the same title and ending. That's weird o.o xD I liked this. I can relate (duh xD) and I think everyone can goodjob

[}Echo{]

Wow... That's weird... Yeah.. Thanks! :)

[Harley (arbiter)]

Remember it? You reviewed it today I believe. Yeah. Good job :)

[}Echo{]

Yeah, I think so. Thanks. :)

[ms. barrie]

no it's not horrible (realized i cannot re-visit that place/poem tonight) - back to reviewing. anyhow, regarding this poem it's great beginning, raw, intense, very descriptive in anger mixed in with regret. i can actually hear this being screamed out by some heavy metal, okay even death metal band, especially the last three lines. maybe i'm wrong, i mean what do i know? but i'd just change:

"Hell, you’d probably be happy

If I was dead," --
i think? if you changed "was to: "were" would be a better word to use than "was" - again i could be wrong though. otherwise, i love raw, anger, spilling emotion like lava that you conveyed in this poem. oh and yeah i can relate to this .... A LOT! great job :)

[}Echo{]

Are you sure? I wasn't even really paying attention to what I was writing, I just got really pissed and it was either write something to express that, or probably punch the next person I saw... Thanks!

Okay, I'l change that.

Thanks a lot! :)

[ms. barrie]

hmm, wait a second. well to be honest, you can (just my honest opinion) take this a lot further, (add more stanzas/verses) dig in deep, growl if you have to to get all that anger, hurt out. on this piece.. but yeah let me see something: what you have here, sounds like it could be a whole chorus for a song. that's something. of course, all the "f**k..." would be "bleeped out" LOL but i'm fond of that word, so i'd leave it in as it's writing in its purest form. yes, definitely a chorus. last three lines being screamed out (need to take a break from listening to metal LOL) - just expand it a little. then this gem will shine even brighter. p.s. 99 % of what i write, i have no idea if it makes any sense, or not...and that's the facts. like i said, you have a great beginning, just let it flow (like i should talk right?) :)

[}Echo{]

Wow.... Yeah, if I made it into a song it would be cool...

[ms. barrie]

i'm telling you, you will. you just need to add more to this. what you wrote (for now) is just the chorus, due to the as the repetition of the word F.U. - i can hear someone screaming the last three lines. just go for it :) - "betrayed" had a line in it saying "you're just a fck'ing liar" in it, but i deleted it - looking forward to reading more of this, if you decide to add to it, i can see it'll be amazing :)

[}Echo{]

Yep. Yeah... Yeah, I'll try to add to it. Thanks! :)

[ms. barrie]

you welcome and believe me i know. still unable to revise "Alma" (shakes head)

[}Echo{]

:) Nice..