Suicide

This a poem a wrote when I was sitting at the park.

Outside is cold and dark and creepy

And as I wonder through the lonely park,

I grab a knife and cut my throat.

I die and look at God with pride

And then I spit Him in the eyes

For He sent me in this world…

What have I ever done to Thee?

To deserve such cruel faith �"

Being just another puppet

In Satan's show of life and death

Reviews

[Gedalya]

Raw emotion, almost punk-like.

[Somebrownnerd]

A very curious write, pretty interesting perspective though; that god sends us to a world controlled by satan. The random quotation mark threw me a bit off, but that's the only critique i got for you. Its funny how life works, "things that hide away" by The Dear Hunter, popped up on my spotify and kind of took this piece to a different level. Good write.

-Z.

[Nickolaye Vincent]

this is well written ash, being new I can't give any advice, just wanted to say I thought it was deep and meaningful.
--NV

[Ash]

Thank you!

[Nickolaye Vincent]

anytime.
--NV

[Pól]

Good write.
I wrote a poem about suicide recently, then got lots of messages from people concerned that i was a out to top myself

[Ash]

Thanks for reading. Well, I'm glad you didn't.

[Steve]

This is such a common question asked. I am counselor and I hear is every day. Its a tough one. But there are things to consider....

[unexpectedsparkle]

hey! it's really well written, and expresses a lot of emotion.

[Rach Crowe]

As a teenager myself, these words hit me. It is really well written and I think the topic us great too, does raise awareness in some ways, well done!! Rach

[Ash]

Thanks!

[Lydia Shutter]

The words are very real and cut through to the reader's soul! Wow! Lydi**

[Ash]

Thank you!

[Anand Sehgal]

A strong poem on anti-establishment. This is also one form of love towards Almighty. I have been fond of this metaphor since I was a teenager.

[Ash]

Thank you.