Her

A poem..

 

 

She sits alone,
Crying in her room.
She has given up.
Given up on everything.

On life,
Love,
Friends,
And hope

She just…

Doesn’t care
Anymore…

She won’t trust,
She won’t love,
She won’t believe

Her heart is too bruised
For her to see

She keeps up this mask
For everyone else to see

All you see
Is this girl,
Who is perfectly
Fine and happy
Who is only
Strong and stubborn
And strong willed

She doesn’t open up,
For anyone, usually,
She never shows anyone
Who she truly is

But every once
And a while

She will break

The mask she is holding,
Will shatter
And all you will see

Is pain,
Tears,
And scars
From the past

Only a glimpse,
Only a peak,
Only a second

Does she show weakness

Then
The mask will come
Back up
And you will not see
Her true colors

Unless she believes

She can trust you,
She can love you,
She can believe in you,
Without being hurt

Though there will always be,
That slither of doubt,
In her heart
Where someday
The pain will leave

For she has been
Hurt too many times
For her to truly succeed

 

 

Reviews

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarri..]

Nice one!
emotional and simulating
Keep it up

[xXChanceXx]

Thanks, you too.

[DarkRainbowPie]

I really like this poem, I can relate to it easily, and I know a lot of people who could do the same. It's structured very well, it draws the reader in and makes them want to keep scrolling down. Well done c'':

[xXChanceXx]

Thanks... Yeah, a lot of people can... Thanks for the review..

[DarkRainbowPie]

Anytime, man ^_^

[xXChanceXx]

:D

[paperdaydreams]

I really like this poem, the words are ones most girls can relate too. the structure helps to make an impact with individual words and short phrases broken to match the mood of the girl, love it :)

[xXChanceXx]

Thank you.. I wrote this thinking about my girlfriend and best friend.. Thanks a lot. :)

[Frieda P]

I think we all know someone like 'her'. This is a touching write about those people who wear a smile to cover their pain....we all wear masks to some degree I think, people don't really want to see or share our pain. Nice one.

[xXChanceXx]

Yeah... My girlfriend and bestfriend are both a lot like this... Yeah.. Yeah, I think we do.. Thank you.

[Frieda P]

My pleasure.

[Katherine S.]

This is a beautiful poem, I like how you put a lot of emotion and thought into it. It's very good. :)

[xXChanceXx]

Thanks :)

[Katherine S.]

:)

[xXChanceXx]

:)

[LostandAlone]

This is a very beautiful poem.. It's very elegent and different... I like it..

[chandlerl]

I've read a lot of poems named her lately LMAO maybe i should do one XDDD
Wow , a good wow, i can really relate to this poem and it was very well written, pauses at all the right parts and is just...very good. Thanks for sending me the read request. If you want my opinion on anything, i'm nothing but truthful, in the good and the bad...but im not usually a b***h about it so...don't be afraid to send me anything =D
-C

[xXChanceXx]

Haha, I couldn't figure out another good title for this... I wrote this thinking about my girlfriend.. Thanks a lot.. Thank you for reading and reviewing... Thanks. Okay, you too. :)