Her Once White Wings

For the ones who live for love

but only find lust.

Soft kisses through deadly wishes

lips crashing, thoughts clashing,

hold on to her

for all the wrong reasons.

Then let go

and watch her fall.

Unloved, but in need of it

Hiding the heavy feeling in her chest

hoping no one will ever know.

The clock keeps ticking

but she's stuck in an eternal still.

A dusty frame on the wall,

dripping black tears.

but still, she makes sure her heart is farthest from her sleeve.

She hates herself

because no one will ever love her, and its her fault

for not being pretty enough, sweet enough, or anything special at all.

She hates that everyone knows

 So she lets herself go.

Drawn to anything that gives her the attention she craves

anything that will fill the gaping hole in her chest

anything to feel protected and wanted.

She'll do anything

Of course, its just a quick fix

to forget the pain she feels when she's alone.

She knows its wrong

but she is too tired to care anymore.

And so, her once white wings,

scarred with hate and weighed down with regret,

have turned to ashes.

All she needs,

is someone to fill the spaces between her fingers

to tell her she's special, she's beautiful

to tell her she's loved.

But she knows she doesn't deserve that

Author's Note

well, i wrote something like this about a misunderstood boy, so i figured id write one about a misunderstood girl too. whatever. rate and review please? ill love you forever if you doo :D

*note -- "wearing your heart on your sleeve" is an expression that means someone who shows there feeling easily, and all the time. just incase you didnt understand that one part i wrote.... yeah.

p.s ~ To Everyone: theres someone out there who loves you more than anything, i promise :]

Reviews

[PaperHearts]

I. Loved. This. :) This was an absolutely stunning write! You told a very real and very serious story of a girl in such a beautifully poetic and heartbreaking way, and I found myself going on this journey through the exploration of her life. I liked the way you structured this, and the way you started off with a simple line such as "She'll do anything", and then continued to describe it further. Amazing. :)
~PaperHearts

Aw what a sad reality some gurls face themselves with. but your review wraps the poem up so warmly. I really love it! :)

[Vitcky Walker]

Great, Victoria, many people feel the same either man and woman
you tried to open everyone's eyes. need us to know what we should fin d truly in life, good job

[Jennika has a short att..]

Dude, this is awesome. I liked the 'wearing your heart on your sleeve' reference, cuz it kinda made it click. It also reminded me of a song that I think is by Fall Out Boy, but I can't remember -_- Anywho awesome poem, and awesome meaning.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I think this was an awesome poem. I think everyone is misunderstood. I really loved this poem because I agree. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Hippy]

indeed this is a powerful peice reminds me of a few girls i know and its a tough situation they gotta learn what they are doing and find alota things out but anyway this was a great peice of art Bravo

[sammyj]

wow, really good, i like this. i really do.

[Emily Quinn]

I can kind of relate, especially to the sixteenth line (4th stanza) I tend to turn to lust and push away advances of love so I did like this poem, you had great imagery;
"And so, her once white wings,
scarred with hate and weighed down with regret,
have turned to ashes."

that line in particular had amazing imagery.
and you showed deep emotion, leaving clues of those hidden below, unmentioned and of the few laying on the surface in the open.

[Taylor H.]

I loved this poem. You're flow was magical. I loved the lines in the first stanza because of the internal and external rhyme. My only problem was how you changed the rhythm throughout the poem. But I liked this poem a lot. :)

[.]

"She hates herself
because no one will ever love her, and its her fault
for not being pretty enough, sweet enough, or anything special at all.
She hates that everyone knows
So she lets herself go."

Wow--very affecting--a powerfully-
descriptive narrative of this girl...
...an excellent creative write!!!

james:-)