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A Poem by victoria
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just... yea

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feeling so blank
twisting eyes, 
crossing and spinning,
cant see whats in front of me
falling, falling, falling
fallen.
needing, wanting, craving, begging,
for what?
confused, alone, cold 
like frost covered flowers,
wilting, wilting, wilting
dead.
sleepless nights
tired thoughts.
unable to think
unable to write
trying, trying, trying
can't.
the rest is just whatever
futile efforts.
turning to dust
thinking, thinking, thinking
bare.
imperfect, unfinished, unproductive
unacceptable.
missing paper and pencil
head swelling
trying to write,
blocked.

© 2010 victoria


Author's Note

victoria
so uhm yea. writers block sucks :/ but i decided i had to write something, so i did lol. im not gonna fix it or go over it or anything cuz its like 5:20 am and i havent slept, however ur welcome to suggest any changes, drastic or tiny. i think ill sleep now xD

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very nice a writers block yet turned out really cool i think

Posted 13 Years Ago


Great write! Inspired and relatable. :) I liked your use of repetition, and thought that it perfectly captured the struggle and frustration associated with writers block. This was a really unique take on the idea, and was executed really well. I loved the line about the frost covered flowers! Beautiful imagery, as always.
~PaperHearts

Posted 14 Years Ago


This was a good poem. I haven't really been able to write much. I really liked this poem though. Thanks for sharing. :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


"the rest is just whatever
futile efforts.
turning to dust
thinking, thinking, thinking
bare."

{jeez--this is a excellent free flowing poem--wow-really-magnificent!!!}

james:-)

Posted 14 Years Ago


As soon as I read it, I thought it would do good as a song (Singers/Song writers/Musicians are lucky people *sigh*). The repetition worked out well too. But as I said, this would feel better as a song :)

Keep writing.

Posted 14 Years Ago



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