Its like a bunch of things is falling on you from my point of view
beautiful poem because i can imagine it just seeing whats filling you up
and your finally saying i dont need this i can move on. Great Job.
good poem, the seventh stanza doesnt rhyme as effectively as the others but it flows quite nicely nevertheless. good emotion, judged was spelt wrong but thats just minor editing. nice style, like it- thumbs up
had a good flow to this, the first stanza didnt seem to rhyme in the same way as the others following tho..
overall, not bad! i was distracted by the word "juged" --do you mean judged? and i think the stanza "want to be free, but i'm only me" may sound better if it was "want to be free, but im stuck within me"
nice emotions in this,
good job
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