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lol this is a weird poem. I dont remember writing it i mean i do but i dont know why it seems so depressed and really i wasnt then my girlfriend woke up and she read it and added what she thought

watching the world fly by

as time dies by

crying to the sky to have just one last second to tell you good bye

but its my time

no more time to sit here and whine and asking god why

i've made my mistakes and i've tried to make them right

so dear god,

 

why make me sit here and watch my life waste away right underneath my face as i watch her drift farther and farther away. like theres been a big split like mommy and daddy leaving to go to their graves. i'm not brave neither am i ashamed of what you put forther for me to ungrave. this beautiful person that makes me stay alive. even though i've felt the sky approachin like a  crash car meant to collide .

so dear father, engrave these words to my side, " I loved you everday that i was alive, thoughts of you helping me survive now that i'm dead, I have you engraved to my mind."

 

my gf:

well baby, this beautiful person you talk about as you weep

is actually dreaming of you, as she falls asleep

there's not one reason why we should be drifting apart

we should be like we used to, at the start

if i could honey, i'd fix it

but i dont know what it is, the light is not lit.

you cant be burried alive

and your supposed to be right by my side.

so stop pretending, and be you.

because i'm completely in love with you.

 

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Author's Note

ignore grammar problems.

Reviews

[Krimson]

this is beautiful, it sounds like you inner emotions sneaking in on yu, i love it, i get hta all of the time,, ill write and rant n and on and not understand why i wrote it down or where it come from yet ill feel this connection to it, i feel a connect wth this one. i like your deep words , its uncommon for a guy to admitt his emotions about things and its good that youre comfortable with postin things like this. if i were you id find whatever that was and keep it b/c its stuff like tha makes peope a good writer and you indeed are. (: i quite enjoy your work and hoping to hear from you (:

[Pointblank]

Your true love sounds very special to you. Don't sit idly by and watch things happen. You must make things happen. If they don't work out like you hoped you can say you gave it your best try. No regrets. Lay it all out on the table no matter who hears and if it falls flat you must move on and find the one that pines for you. Young yet..the world is your oyster. Do not settle for less than you deserve.
The poem is confusing at times though I feel your point was loud and clear. Your hurting and want your girl back.