At a Glance

At a glance

I see your face

I must have been lost

Or been misplaced

 

You left me as a child

What could I have done

You start to come closer

I start to run

 

I’d rather not see you

I need you no more

You destroyed my heart

As I was lying on the floor

 

Crying hours at a time

Sometimes I wish I could have known

What did I do wrong?

You never got to watch me grow

 

You’ve tried to get in touch

You want to make amends

The relationship between you and I

Has come to an end

Just stay out of my life

Like you have until now

Don’t worry mom

You'll survive somehow

Author's Note

Not based on my life, just fyi.

Reviews

[Lady V]

I must say thbutat I am truly feeling this piece for a few reasons. Reason number one is that most times the person that is an absentee parent is the father so I love the change of view. Second reason is that this is happening more and people say that there has to be a relationshiup withg both parents but i dont feel there does.Great piece sometimes that relationship can be more harmful then helpful. Great Piece.

[SarahCortland]

another great poem definitely 100/100

[Sarah]

Sad piece, but inspirational in a sense that you're able to move on and learn from bad experiences. I particularly like when you used repetition for example at the end of the second stanza, "You start to come closer / I start to run" very beautiful. However, I don't necessarily know that rhyme is needed here and towards the end of the poem it sounds a bit forced. Otherwise, I liked reading this. :)

[Khaotic Katastrophe]

alot of feeling in it to not be your life. thats really good. you're talented. and i'd have to say that this is rather close to me

[Tate Morgan]

I think it best to heal any relationship with a parent

[Legion]

Actually, this would fit my life perfectly. My mom left me (and my dad) when I was about 6 months old. NIcely done for someone who has not lived it. You captured that feeling well.

[Manda]

o wow this was awesome! you did a really nice job! loved it!