Dream Theater "Sequence 2"

The time has come

The beginning of the show

Dream theater is on the bill

Are you ready to go?

 

What will happen next

Will I get out alive

Just thinking about it now

It's giving me hives

 

I have now arrived

And what do I see

A gal to my side

And the city in front of me

 

I am on a ferris wheel

Not bad I guess

Her with a beautiful smile

Clothed in a lovely dress

 

We go round and round

Taking in the site

Seems so romantic

Give her a kiss, I just might

 

As I move in

The ride starts to slow

I hear the attendant say

“It's time to go”

 

Just my luck

Opportunity now gone

Guess I'll wait next time

As dream theater continues on

 

Author's Note

2 Edition of Dream Theater

Reviews

[Bethany Woody]

I like this one too. There is the unfinished scene from the dream and the series is unfinished too, kinda wraps it all together. Looking forward to the next episode, your imagination is the limit or are you writing from actual dreams? Now there would be a good twist for these......

This one had a few small hicups for me.
--The time has come About time for the show- the double use of the word time, just kinda threw it off and this is the begining where you are trying to hook a reader. Maybe, The time has come, the bgining of the show....
--Will I get alive- think this should have been Will I get out alive...
--And what do we see- you have yet to introduce your riding buddy yet you speak as if she is already there, we should be I...
--Dressed in a lovely dress- again it is almost a double use of the same word, just to make it interesting use something other then dressed, wrapped, covered, clothed. Dictionary.com has a thesauras(sp?)
--Guess I'll wait next time- Guess I'll wait until next time..

Okay I got a little persnikinty with this one and I'm sorry. It's still agood and I think it makes a great idea for a series.

[Lady V]

Brandon....................You better keep them coming. I like the flow of each part and I am waiting for the 3rd one.

Live, Love and Learn

Lady V

[Seriana]

You're on a roll boy! Lovely.
I do agree with Blue Jean Baby though, there were a few double words used. I think if you changed them up, it'd flow alot better.
Thanks for the dream sharing though! This is fun. :)

[Seriana]

You're on a roll boy! Lovely.
I do agree with Blue Jean Baby though, there were a few double words used. I think if you changed them up, it'd flow alot better.
Thanks for the dream sharing though! This is fun. :)