I Stand Alone

 

Battered and broken

Bruised and torn

Clothes that are ripped

Shoes that are worn

 

I have no money

No place to call home

All that I have

Are the streets that I roam

 

Patiently waiting

For my chance to come

Where I can live again

With the help of someone

 

All I ask

Is to live a normal life

To hopefully get married

And have a beautiful wife

 

But for now

I’ll sit here and try

To get on with my being

Before life passes me by

Reviews

[Norma J. Jessee]

I love your heartfelt sincerity in the things you write.
This one although the thought stayed the same throughout
your rhythm faltered in the last two verses. The first three
verses flowed like a soft smooth stream, the last two were
a little bumpy and just didn't flow like the rest.

I love this poem, the concept is beautiful the words touching.
You could say something along these lines,

All I ask
Is for a normal life
Hopfully settle down
With a beautiful wife

But for now
I'll sit here and try
To get on with living
Ere life pass me by

These are just some sugestions. I wouldn't want you to change the meaning or wording just switch the wording around some to make it flow better. As I said This poem is beautiful and I love it. You write from the heart and that is why the poem has so much meaning and feeling to it.

[just is]

This is so wonderful and so beautiful as well as sincere. I like your style, you are talented

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

I really like this notion; great poem ---mishel

[Pinky]

wow i really liked this.... great flow, form and rhyme!

[Seriana]

Awww, Brandon! How lovely. :) You write such NICE nice rhyming. I do love it. Great job!

[The Autumn Faerie]

My heart aches for you...

You ask for the simplest of things; the things we take for granted every day...
And I hope that the best of things come to you someday.

These few stanzas say a great deal about the world today.