bad memory

With eyes deep in thought

love is what you sought

reality is lost from your mind

a will is what you cease to find

With eyes deep in thought 

with a love is who you fought

now those memories haunt you

and there's not a thing you can do

lonely is now what you are

and love is for what you've reached so far

you've destroyed your one and only chance

at anything such as romance

Author's Note

I wrote this really quick and didn't really take much time to think about it. :)

Reviews

[ATG]

This was a very good poem. It flowed pretty good. I really got a sense of heart break from it.

My only issue is this:

"and there's not a thing you can think to do"

I would suggest losing "think to" from this line. Have it read:

"and there's not a thing you can do"

I think it will flow a lot better that way. Just a suggestion.

Despite the very minor flaw, it was a great read.

[samurai212]

You are good hun I love your writes

[Dalebear]

I love this poem it was sad but beautiful...................what a good write

Dalebear

[Adam :P]

perfect. I love the last 2 lines my favorite. wonderful!

Short, but definetly to the point.
Sad, but also beautiful.

[Sevendayspast]

Sad but beautiful poem, story of my life :P

[SpokenWord]

People seek love and when they have it, they fight love all in the same moment. I feel people love the idea of love more than love it self. Another good write by you.

[Roger Ferguson II]

nice aabb rhyme scheme, vry simple =)

[billie peach]

Very real. For the little time you said it took to write this I say that it was well worth it. A very interesting and intriguing piece of work. I really love it. Good job!

[PaperHearts]

A very thought-provoking write! I liked how raw and real this felt, and thought that the fact that you wrote it straight was definitely an advantage to the overall execution of your poem. This poem flowed so effortlessly, and I felt myself pausing after each couplet to think about the meaning of what you said. The first two and last two lines in particular were favourites of mine. Nice work,
~PaperHearts