My Last Promise(could be changed)

This is a rough draft of the book I'm writing, I've working pretty hard on this and am pretty proud of the way it came out. Again this is just a rough draft so ignore my grammar mistakes. I am constantly revising my book to make it as best as I possibly can. Let me know what you think and give me some ideas if you want. Constructive criticism is welcome don't be afraid to tell me what you think, good or bad it will help me in the long run. Hope you like it! :)