When All Light Dies

In the depths of loneliness
The heart shattering coldness
Frozen tears upon the sullen face
No life within the dark sunken eyes
Only darkness within the wounded heart

Doubled over in anguish
The pain intensifies its fury
Tears melt as it drowns its creator
Sinking deeper into the depths of pain
Lost deep within the confines of his loneliness

The heart bleeds
From its countless wounds
Only to heal and be wounded again
A never ending cycle of anguish and torture
Only to be exploited and manifest throughout the soul

Yearning for touch
Hoping for love to heal him
So he seeks with blood dripping eyes
Love can be his savior or his executioner
Fearing his remedy yet admiring its miracles

Falling deeper into the depths
Deeper into my foreseen inevitable demise
But floating on your cloud that keeps me living
The same cloud that dries my tears and numbs my pain
Lifts me from the endless fall of my depression and misery

A cloud made from hope
A love created from my dreams
A girl manifested from my fantasies
A cure wished by my desperate thoughts of agony

 

Total Darkness
Even though when all light dies
Your heart will guide me through the depths

 

One day....

 

Never fear love...

 

Author's Note

All reviews are appreciated

Reviews

[UnderINK]

This is a fairly well written poem, but I have some critiques for it. Well, in two of the stanzas you use the same phrase twice, but it's not a constant repetition, so it's a little out of place ('in the depths of loneliness'). Although I empathize with this poem in that I've experienced before, I don't feel it was deeply impacting enough. I also noticed at the end you abandoned your stanza structure, which threw it off a little. I think it could use a little revision, but overall is a nice piece.

[Marilyn My Bitterness]

i love the choice of picture. words are just another form of art so to find the picture that matches is not an easy thing, but the one you chose was amazing. very nicely written poem. a lot of emotions and feelings that all touch the reader. nice work.

[Dshaman14]

i love this!!!!!!!!

i lot it all

whahaha!!!

the pictures nice too

words clearly define what they supposed to mean

well used

good wrk pal

[~crazy Beautiful~]

the title is perfect.
I love the message
my faovrite stanza
"Doubled over in anguish
The pain intensifies its fury
Tears melt as it drowns its creator
Sinking deeper into the depths of pain
Lost deep within the confines of his loneliness"

what really grabbed my attention
"Total Darkness
Even though when all light dies
Your heart will guide me through the depths"
I loved these lines
nice work
thank you for entering my contest

[Ember]

Very well written. Excellent choice in words, good rythm.. It really conveys the emotion you're writing about. I really like it, good job.

[~D.A. Phoenix~]

Emotional but not completely sad. I can relate to the sentiment. nice worl

[Jaffa Forbes]

cool poem, very sad but I'm glad it's not all misery. That's important. nice ending.
jaff

[Jessica L Auster]

I liked this peice. It reminded me of something The Used would sing. I just thought you needed a few periods here and there so the poem doesn't sound like one big run-on sentence. But you're a good writer, and thanks for the reviews by the way. hah.

[Trip]

wow man. that was really deep. I liked it alot. Your really good at this stuff man. keep it seriously.

[Dressed in Poetry]

Very good! The word choice is amazing. I like how each line within the stanza gets progressively longer. The emotion is good. Nice job.

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Wow, this poem is amazing. Great write!!!

Heather