Free Of Tears

Produced within your mind

Pain slowly nurtures the seed of anguish

Planted deep inside the core of the human heart

Watered by blood and misery

Slowly it outgrows its host

The pain becomes more inflicted

Agony times a thousand fold

The cringed face of the victim

Premature no longer

The seed has grown

The heart is left with scars

Ripping through the chest of its victim

Up onto the throat

The victim chokes

No longer is the resistance commencing

All hope is lost

The plant becomes a tree

Ripping and manifesting

Corrupting the mind

It bears fruit on its leaves

Emotion sways the branches of the parasite

As the fruit slowly dangles from it's branch

One drops in the form of tears

Beneath the eyes of the cringed face

As emotion no longer sways the branches

But shake the tree from its foundation

The tree is stripped dry of its fruit

And the victim is now a free soul

Free of tears and free of pain

Even though the heart

Is left with scars

 

Never be afraid to cry

 

Reviews

[Str8jacket]

I agree with my friend. I think it's really powerful. I think that many people can relate (I know I can) and take a lot away from it. Once again you've left me with a lot to think about.

" The pain becomes more inflicted

Agony times a thousand fold

The cringed face of the victim

Premature no longer

The seed has grown

The heart is left with scars"

I think those are my favorite lines. Like always I say keep writing because you have talent.

[justjenn_2u]

This poem is brilliant! I love the growth of the tree as to emotions. You have a wonderful talent and I look forward to reading more of your work! Good job!

[~crazy Beautiful~]

I felt your pain as I read this
My favorite lines
"Planted deep inside the core of the human heart

Watered by blood and misery

Slowly it outgrows its host

The pain becomes more inflicted"
Very creative
Nice work
thank you for entering my contest

[Mariah]

One drops in the form of tears

Beneath the eyes of the cringed face

As emotion no longer sways the branches

But shake the tree from its foundation


i like the imagery right here.
it's quite lovely, but heartbreaking.

And the victim is now a free soul

Free of tears and free of pain

Even though the heart

Is left with scars



Never be afraid to cry


i almost feel free myself after reading this. :)

[Steffi]

"The plant becomes a tree
Ripping and manifesting
Corrupting the mind
It bears fruit on its leaves
Emotion sways the branches of the parasite
As the fruit slowly dangles from it's branch"

[JC Fox]

Awesome piece and I love the picture at the end, you have a true talent my friend.

[Jazmyne]

wow this was deap, every word had a meaning things that actually made me think about . i have had many things ba happen to me and i didnt even cry..not even blink.
when you wrote: Free of tears and free of pain
Even though the heart
Is left with scars - that part stuck to me. cause it is true your heart once the pain is gone leaves scars on it. very well writtin.

[Jaffa Forbes]

very raw and heartfelt. well done for writing this. Just a suggestion; it would be nice to have some puncuation, so that I know how to read it correctly they way you read it.
good stuff
jaff

[lori c]

i am all over this one. too many people have crossed my path who claim they never cry -- i watch them struggle through life, barely getting by, cause they cant get by their own pains. scarred tissue has no feeling -- ever more the sadder for the scarred heart. tears are healers. nicely done.

[Robert Luna]

This was wonderful and so deeply moving. I love the picture and your words have such passion and strength to them. You have written a piece to be very proud of and it speaks a wisdom that is truer than a heart can sometimes except. We live and we struggle if we are among the lucky ones we will have a chance at true love and feel the warmth of its embrace. Really an enjoyable way to start my reading off tonight with. Will mean the other piece i read tonight better come with it.


Great Job!!!!!!

[E-Stiz]

wow, this is really great
its deep, and has a great metaphorical meaning.