Judgement

Who am I to judge, as these hands were to create
Wove webs of reality, threads of common fate
Crafted valleys of despair, and seas of wealth
Who am I to judge, but only myself

I look at my creation, as I marvel at their whim
Shadows of fear take place, as they fear not me but sin
They use me as excuses, and yet I hold no grudge
And yet I ask myself, who am I to judge

I hold my last breath, as depression seeks my skies
Rain and storms fall, as tears leak from my eyes
Earthquakes shake the earth, as I take my final stand
Who am I to judge, but the world of man

Author's Note

All reviews will be appreciated

Reviews

[Str8jacket]

Wow. I think this is a really great piece of work. It was so eloquent and more beautiful than anything my mind could produce. The flow of your words are strong and add so much. We often ask ourselves the question "who am I to judge?" because often so many have it worse off and yet most people judge anyway. I find this also a thought provoking piece. good job.

[vanishing]

wow.. you really speak from the depths of intelligance beyond your years
this writing draws the reader to contemplate what it means to define
judgement as a self reflection in in order to gain awareness. Nicely Done!

[~crazy Beautiful~]

this was a refreshing read, a wonderful message
nice writing
i enjoyed this piece very much
these lines
"I hold my last breath, as depression seeks my skies
Rain and storms fall, as tears leak from my eyes
Earthquakes shake the earth, as I take my final stand
Who am I to judge, but the world of man"
incredible
thank you for entering my contest

[Ember]

Well, as always with your work this piece has good rhythm and flow, definitely interesting choice of words. This character is seems so all-mighty, it strikes me as though you meant them to be a god of some kind, maybe a spirit of the earth.. Perhaps even the perception of the Christian God. I may have this interpretation wrong, however. Once again, if I am wrong, tell me so~

[Jazmyne]

i really liked the last paragraph. i like how you put each word..it made me think about alot of things. this one had alot of power. it is true everyone judges even though we ask our self why. i really enjoy your writtings.

[JC Fox]

another great poem (the reviews are kind of lame its late and my brain left the building) you do pose a good point with this poem

[Robert Luna]

Words of wisdom it would seem. We have no place another as we don't know where they've been. The war they fought or the lives they saw lost. We are all people and the core of who we are is meant to be peaceful creatures but yet the differences that are force feed down out throat cause us to look not at the light but the darkness of human life. We must have a common goal in order to make it in life. I agree who are we to judge when really were only judging ourselves. Very passionate and well thought out words here I am both impressed and moved by them.

Great Job!!!!!!

[PhoeniX]

very deep. enjoyed this so much.

[Heidi]

you have a very good flow. Im not a huge fan of poetry but this piece has me thinking. For me this is good, i will be thinking about the meaning for a while. Im unsure of the narrator's view. but who am i to understand your poetry. it is your words mixed with your thoughts, no one has to understand it but you.

[luthien7]

Thanks for the read - this is really beautiful, and I feel like as a writer I can relate. You express yourself well. I can't offer any criticism as I don't see anything I would change. The last stanza is my absolute favorite!

[~D.A. Phoenix~]

I agree with my friend below. (Although she's lying about the eloquence she posseses.) It's interesting to give a perspective to a higher power in which to me is all in how you define it. Great job