I think your placement of commas in your stanzas are rather irregular, since most lines are separate thoughts. Personally, I don't think you need a comma after these lines:
1. you look me in straight in the eyes,
2. i'm hesitant, i don't want to feel it,
3. i don't want the warmth,
4. i don't want to cry,
5. i dont want you to know,
6. i'm daring,
7.. you're daring,
Personally, I think you should abolish all the punctuation. It would create a greater effect.
I think your placement of commas in your stanzas are rather irregular, since most lines are separate thoughts. Personally, I don't think you need a comma after these lines:
1. you look me in straight in the eyes,
2. i'm hesitant, i don't want to feel it,
3. i don't want the warmth,
4. i don't want to cry,
5. i dont want you to know,
6. i'm daring,
7.. you're daring,
Personally, I think you should abolish all the punctuation. It would create a greater effect.