My Black Hearted Princess

This is a song for my black hearted princess

this is a story engraved with pain

in the era when death embraced love

in the era that the darkness took over my soul

 

So long we have been waiting

for that veil to be removed

'till so long reached forever

'till we were sick of waiting

 

Tears, oh tears

the most beautiful crystals

constructed with an honest pain

sparkling seeds of the eyes I love the most

 

Vulnerable at last

when the time comes

and the time came

for your sins to be paid

 

Right or wrong

Black or white

It really doesn't matter anymore

It's all just titles

 

I tried to show you the world

but you said you were blind

when I said you just didn't wanna see

you just wanted to live in your own version of reality

 

Just hide your face from the world that hurts you

shut your eyes I'm here in your darkest tower

frozen by the fear of you

you are just a myth, my black hearted princess...

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Rick Puetter]

Dear � Vampire Girl �,

I have just read your 10 most recent poems (starting with "A story is born" and extending back to the nine poems before that) to try and get a feeling about your poetry and where you are coming from. I see a deep sense of detachment from the world. Your see most lives as a front, a mask, for the person that lies beneath and that the true inner person is not really seen. I think this is true of most people. Most people have a need to fit in and are afraid of not being accepted. Not everyone is this way, however. It is mostly a matter of self-confidence.

Anyway, to your poem. Of the poems that I've read, I selected "My Black Hearted Princess" because I think it is the very best of those poems. All of your poems are very nicely written and convey easily and beautiful what you want to project, i.e., this living but not connectling with the world and people around you. But the current poem is exceptionally insightful. From the highly evolved and detached:

"Right or wrong
Black or white
It really doesn't matter anymore
It's all just titles"

to the insightful analysis of character:

"I tried to show you the world
but you said you were blind
and I said you just didn't wanna see
you just wanted to live in your version of reality"

You show excellent and perceptive vision. Reading this was a delight. High marks!

Very best regards,

Rick

[Leran Vakem]

A real good poem, I enjoyed reading it.
Keep it up
Leran Vakem

[Nik Dendera]

Some very acute observations herein, one liners that transcend the page.

Reading the other reviews, I can understand if you say that its not about you. Existencial creativity allows for a more involved piece with no strings attached. You can tap into the dark for just a moment, then step back out.

Very, very well written, definately among some of your much stronger pieces. This is going to go into my favourites.

[.:Naiira Harlow:.]

Sadness and Anger all in one poem. It's interesting how you twisted them both together to make the reader wonder which is the more dominant emotion. Well done!
-Twilight

[Sarah Erickson]

I read your bio before I read this poem, and I really have to wonder if you were being completely honest when you said the poems don't relate directly to you. I say this because it feels emotion-filled, and it is beautifully written. There's a sadness to it, but that somehow adds to the beautiful world of words that you've created in this piece.
I really like this, and I think you did an excellent job.

[Laughing Lunatic]

I really loved this piece!!!
I would change Tears ,tears oh, to Tears of in the third stanza.
Excellent job!!

[Riverdance]

This is a very well written piece etched with lonliness. Very Perceptive too.

THanks for entering in the Move Me contest!

~Rd

[Spoken]

interesting piece. I see this as loss of part of yourself due to a love that died.. either relationship or just the feeling you cannot feel any longer. Well written. I enjoyed this. Made me think :-)