Rotten Meat In Our Tomb

Let's just sit together now

and talk about the future darling

when you'll be away and I'll be slaying

all the people that you ever loved

 

When you'll wake up from your deep sleep

you'll see everything sick I've done for you

and we'll celebrate together in our tomb of eternal rest

projected by the twisted technology I have created

 

Let's just paint it all crimson

we've got lots of "paint" here

nothing goes to waste my darling

in our gleeful dance of rotten meat

 

I promise I'll cook for you

as I said a while ago killing is the greatest joy

corpses all the way to Hell to lead you darling

I am the monster here and you can't save yourself

 

Too bad all the fun is over

sunrise comes and vanishes all

but I promise I'll be here for you darling

when all the light in your soul is gone...

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Krista]

Awesome poem. I hope it doesn't sound creepy to say that I enjoyed reading it. The concept is wonderful, and it comes across very dark and seductive. Especially the finish, I think I've got chills!

"but I promise I'll be here for you darling
when all the light in your soul is gone..."

Using an endearing term such as "darling", and then the invite into the darkness. I think you've achieved the art of temptation very well. I hope this makes sense, I'm a bit sleepy and blurry brained. Keep up the great work!

[Miss Prince]

Have you seen 'V for Vendetta'? Because that's what I saw in my head when I first read this. It's a good poem, though. Very frightening in the sense that it's supposed to be loving at the same time.

[Sean M. Addams]

very nicely done ... the imagery in this piece is awesome .... overall creepy, dark and very well done!!!!

[Laughing Lunatic]

Outstanding imagery!!
Beautifully penned and nice twisted ride through the undead.
This kept my intrest the entire time Great job!! =)

[Adela Muresan]

X) Truly twisted and macabre.
The picture selection is perfect, and the combination between evil and romance is greatly penned.
*****Poem.

A.M.

[Celtic Cat]

Very nice!!! Best vampire piece I've read in a long time! Love it!

[Pink Poison]

Very intriguing. I had to read it twice. Great (although horrific) imagery. I love the juxtaposition of love and death by murder. What a fantastic journey into a the land of the undead.

[Legion]

Freakishly awesome. Love the sinisterness of it. Kudos.

[Nik Dendera]

Creepy stuff! The last two lines are great, very cold and chilling.

This is kind of a weird cross between vampire love and sci-fi and it actually works!

Great poem!!