Dog Day (Tanka)

Playing

running after them

lightly nipping at their heels

before the ball rolls 

across the sand into the

salt water then I get rest

Reviews

[Workvio]

You have penned a wittingly intelligent and pleasantly vivid portrait of a dog's life from the dog's point of view ... I enjoyed this piece ... Wish I had the knack for writing this style of poetry, but I do not ...

[Willard Wells]

Thank you. Marvin. I am not sure what I have a knack for, so I put pen to paper and see what happens. But I must say most of my writing comes from inspiration unexpectedly.

I have written some pieces on command or to a given idea, but those are far and few between.

[Scrap]

Really nice! I didnt know what a tanka is....i should try it once.

Thank you

[Willard Wells]

I was introduced to them about 3 weeks ago. I also like Haiku and Senryu, but the extra space helps if I am in need of more words than they use. Thank you so much for your kind words.

[Scrap]

P.S.....i just wrote one...gonna put it up! :-)))...thanks for the trigger!!!
Im not sure what ill call it....i think 'it's time'....hope u read it.

[Willard Wells]

I surely will, yes I know your names not "Surely". I at first worried about the count and then look back to see if I achieved the other elements, which I am still not sure I understand. In the end, if it flow and feels good to me, I leave it. I like it and it can be called anything people want. I'm happy and that is why I write. For me first.

[Scrap]

haha :-)
I like puzzles...and this feels like a puzzle...so I had fun. I wonder what u think.

[Willard Wells]

Well, I think many things, often many of them at the same time. It's more a question of when you step within the vision of my mind as to what you will find me thinking. Thank you for playing and please pick up a copy of the home game at your local store. Peace out.

[David Scott]

I really enjoyed this thought Will.

You could put these (tanka) poems in a calendar for a daily poetic cup of coffee.

I was right there at the beach with my dogs...

[Willard Wells]

Great coolness. I am so glad you were able to feel the place. I must add a picture. Thank you for your kind words.