Lighted Way

Paths in Life

Drifting into the nothingness,

I allow my mind to wander

or, at least, that is the story

I want to be told if I slip between the folds.

Expectations are small,

a small piece of happiness

for all, with a special place with my love.

Which makes life real.

Ups and downs go by in life,

if you have undying love, 

the bright sunshine of 

day will shine through.

Showing you the lighted way!

Reviews

[softlyfall]

Perfect. It always delights me when nuances completely transform meaning...there are worlds (within worlds) of difference between "nothingness" and "THE nothingness". Loved the internal rhyme and careful but natural feel of this. But mostly, I love the concept...and I couldn't agree more.
Those who die with the most "things" are simply dead, those who die with love in their hearts are eternally wealthy.

[Willard Wells]

Without love, there is not life. Or a life that I would not want to have.

I appreciate the kind words and your stopping by. I am glad you enjoyed this piece

[Mercy Fae]

Optimistic poems are always good to write and read. You write beautifully

[Willard Wells]

I am the optimist and have no choice, but to write that way. Unless I am in my darker place, but I always come out on the other side. thank you so much for your time in visiting my words.

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Willard! : )
I very much enjoy the lyrically-philosophical ambiance your words and their feelings portray.
It must be nice to drift-off into "nothingness", aa intermittent rhymes shine like little glints of dispersed sparkling gold.
The font choice and presentation are a nice touch, too, as is the message you've led us to … to choose the pathway of love to light our way.
A coupl'a techy hints: Vi, consider the following to eliminate unnecessary verbiage, making for a stronger poetical voice:

Drifting into nothingness,
I allow my mind to wander,
or at least that is the story
I want told if I slip between the folds.

V3L2 and 3, bring "undying love" up to L2. L4, break this line at "day".

Just thoughts shared with a Fellow-Poet to contemplate … you know we're always trying to help one another, or wishing we could, eh?
Whatever, this is one that truly blessed me with a bit of enjoyment and love light on an otherwise rather dreary, overcast, and chilly day … thanks, My Friend! ⁓ Richard

[Willard Wells]

I will take your information and add to my mental file. I have reduce a number of my recent piece because of a similar comment from you a couple of week ago. I will gradually update many and this may be where I start.

I always value your views and comments with regard to my work.

[Richard🖌]

Willard,
I know your work is well worth the effort, My Friend!

[Richard🖌]

What about the rest of my review … critique was just a part of it, ya know … LOL!

[Willard Wells]

Your time and words and views of my work are greatly appreciated. I got so focused on the changes i failed to complete the process. The font is a change since the first two reviews had issues with it. I think it may have to do with the site. Some fonts seem supported in the beginning but no always on both sides apparently.

I am happy you enjoyed it and understand I am flying for the most part by the seat of my pants. Your kind words are greatly appreciated.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you immensely, Willard … you are fine poet, My Friend; one whom I greatly enjoy.
Happy New Year! : )

[Lizardo]

Indeed we all need a constant, an undying love that when we say: We can't no more, it says: Get up and go. There a lot in life and we as writers are the messengers of it, of life, because we are the ones who have the guts to express our feelings to the world, while others suffer alone, we may even help them get through with our writing. Anything can happen to us, from being lost to being hurt by love or physically or something but there's always light at the end, but we must remember something: Life is like going in an underground tunnel, sometimes there are going to be little lamps shining our way and sometimes there is complete darkness, so much that we can't see where we are going but if going forward and having God guide our way through it, Then at the end of our lives, maybe we'll reach the peace that we want.
On the poem: Good flow and word usage, my favorite one was the constant analogy, that one is going to be carved in my head for next year and a good ending too, showing sings of hope and happiness, either way, sadness, happiness, emotions, they are all in our mind and who controls our minds? Us, if we want to, they can go away and we can keep whatever one we want, the thing is, we are blind to it.
Rating: 100 (As always)
Happy new year Willard! by the way, you might want to check my latest poem, it's the last one of 2015, I've face some writers block lately but I think I managed to come out of it.
Enjoy your day!

[Willard Wells]

I went to your site this morning and before I could read anything I had to head out. definitely on my radar.

With a review like yours, I feel you may have liked it and thank you.

What is life without love, Emptiness and loneliness.

[Lizardo]

I like to give more in depth reviews, I feel people are going to like them more!
Indeed what is it?

[Tina Kline]

A very positive poem. Love does make life much easier in th hard times and much more fun during the good times. It is a very positive and inspiring poem.

[Willard Wells]

Tina, thank you for your kind words and yes love makes everything in life more palatable.
read moreTina, thank you for your kind words and yes love makes everything in life more palatable.

I am glad you enjoyed it. Many years ago I had a teacher name Kline that was from eastern Oregon. Taught in Hillsboro.

[Tina Kline]

You are very welcome.

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Its very soothing & delights the heart of readers. Great One!

[Willard Wells]

Thank you for reading and commenting on my work and I am glad you enjoyed it.

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Welcome friend :)

[alifeacoustic]

Beautifully written and wise words to heed. Only drawback is the font. It detracted from the piece by being too difficult to read. I had to copy and paste, then change the font. Apart from that, superb.

[Willard Wells]

OK two font comments, so I will make a change in font. I am ver.y happy you enjoyed my words and thank you for visiting

[andrew mitchell]

Love and support is comforting thro life and the sharing. Apart from the font size an excellent emotional write Willard!

[Willard Wells]

Font size or font. I increase my font size because so many on here do not and it is hard to read. I am using I think 3 pt on this.

Anyway thank you for reviewing my words and your kind words.

[andrew mitchell]

i think the style of the letters is blurry to my eyes thats all lol

[Willard Wells]

It is possible that the software I am using and font I picked is not supported by this site. It looked fine on my side, but I changed it and hopefully this new one works.