Expiration

Adventure in writing

The sun slipping

slowly from the sky,

as a sliver of moon

greeted the darkness of night.

Finding my mind

sliding on a similar

path as the sun,

hoping to find

comfort in the distant

light reaching

out to me.

Or so it seems.

Where I am

I know not.

Something happened

and now I am here.

Attempting to focus

and I see

the light

as the brightness grows.

Is the light

coming to me,

or am I

going to the light?

Beyond my thoughts

and the light,

I feel no sensations,

but dark with approaching light.

I now see

shadows growing

close within

the light.

Wait, I think

someone I know

is in the light.

Everything is becoming clear.

Yes now it's

clear and I

have found

my place.

All the faces

and all my past

rush to me

as I am called home.

Author's Note

experimentation.

Reviews

[Roland Petrov]

Maybe it's because of Chocolate Chip that the "Wait" verse had me anticipating a comic ending. Though it was not to be, I do like how you've incorporated our anecdotal knowledge of near death without resorting to overt spirituality. I do believe that "an" after "Something happened" should be "and". There's also an issue or two with commas: "Wait" should definitely have a comma after it, but "past" in the last verse should not. I'd call this a quite successful adventure in writing, and the pic enhances this work nicely.

[Willard Wells]

Thank you for your help.. Sometimes I just leave out all punctuation, but I am trying to get past that. The first note "and", has been in my mind, but just never got off the dime and changed it. Update coming.

[Valentine]

Like the experiment. Nice way to think of the end times and the wonderful start of a new life above. Valentine

[Willard Wells]

Not sure how the end may truly be, but from my beliefs and stories of those that were headed to the other location, it sounds about right. It will be this or more beautiful with the God I believe in. Thanks for stopping by and leaving your words.

[Perkele.7885]

This ie where you will be taking me after the pull ups, sir!

[Willard Wells]

But it sounds like a rather pleasant journey.
But if we start slow and easy lifting, the journey will be later. We control our destiny. And again Raj I appreciate your attending my lectures. There will be a questionnaire mailed out later if you would be so kind as to critique our work. Thank you again for reading my words and commenting.

[Not here]

the picture reminded me of a scene i saw in haiti. and I really like this one willard. sorry i havent gotten to your requests lately. im working on it

[Willard Wells]

No problem on the reads my friend. Everything in it's time. Life is a journey and things take place when they do. Thanks for viewing this one, I really liked it also. It felt right to me an that's what you have to have in the end. I am glad you liked it..

[Not here]

no problem willard :) im glad you ejoyed writing it. thats most important

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Beautiful flow..
Cascade of self realisation so very well penned!
Splendid Poem!
Absolutely loved it!

PS: In the sixth stanza, third line I guess you wanted to say 'or' not 'our'.

[Willard Wells]

Thank you so much for stopping by and commenting, but especially for spotting what I missed on numerous reads. My mind kept seeing "or" I guess. Thanks again. Corrected now.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are very welcome.

[Chirag Kumar]

This is such a beautiful expression of the ultimate truth and destination of life. It shouldn't be scary like many people think. Excellent Willard.!

[Willard Wells]

Thank you Chirag. I appreciated your time and your comments.

[zaisham9393]

This is amazing ;) Beautifully expressed
thanks for sharing dear friend;)!

[Willard Wells]

I appreciate your taking time to view my work and comment.

[KWP]

this is lovely and gives me a feel of release ... everything being enveloped in light ... becoming light ... returning home ...

great flow and visuals

warm, glowing and peaceful X

[Willard Wells]

Thank you for taking time to view my words and comment. Glad you enjoyed.