Refugee

Hard Life

Morning comes early in the camp,

as we wake to another day.

Collecting water is what comes first,

so we can wash and cook before we play.

Our home is a tent,

among a thousand more.

Leaving our town and friends behind

in an effort to stay alive and nothing more.

Five days in the desert

we escaped a brutal land.

Crossing the border

to find a new peaceful land.

We have no money

or worldly goods.

But with mother, father and sister too,

we are still a family with love.

Looking for a Home!

Reviews

[Sai]

This is amazing; in my mind I imagined a family going down a path where a sunset lies and walking into the distance. Beautifully written!

[Willard Wells]

Thank you so much for reading and commenting on my work.

[Sai]

Keep writing beautiful work!

[marcus]

So many people without homes, displaced, all over the world!

[Willard Wells]

Thanks for your time and comments.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

An apt and genuinely caring piece that engages the reader with the feel of the story being portrayed by the victim. You used the same word twice to rhyme, more and more and land and land?

[Willard Wells]

I know about land and I did not feel anything else sounded right or conveyed what I wanted. Maybe in the future. Thanks John.

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In the turmoil that is often the life of the refugee, you interject hope that within the family unit life can still have routine and be good... nicely done, Willard!

[Willard Wells]

The refugees are a group that are casualtie of war and tyrant run governments. Throw away families is not an acceptable situation. Thanks for visiting. And for reviewing.

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I agree, Willard... I hear these things in the news every day... the latest numbers say there are more than 60 million refugees with no place to call home and that the majority have come from three main regions... it's sad that this is almost twice Canada's population... so very sad... you are welcome, my friend

[Perkele.7885]

line *8 is redundant
last line a home
line*15 But,

I like the poem but, I would like to see a little more story development!

[Willard Wells]

I thought there would be more but the rest did not come as of yet. I will review my errors and consider the expansion.

[Marie]

Wistful...refugees looking what is so hard to find...

[Willard Wells]

Just thinking of their plight this day. Thanks for the review.