Shelter

Shelter

a cold starry eve

homeless huddled in doorways

some will die this night 

Reviews

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

A very sad reality, expressed so well in 5-7-5. Nice work, Willard.

[Willard Wells]

Thank you for your time in reading and commenting on my work.

[Coyote Poetry]

A sad place described in this poem. Cold of Winter does take many. Thank you Willard for sharing the powerful poetry.
Coyote

[Willard Wells]

Thank you Coyote. I appreciate your taking time to view my work and comment.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Willard.

[Samaira]

It's so sad that while people are complaining about the turkey not being cooked right, there are people who are dying because of lack of shelter outside. It's amazing how you capture that in such a sort poem. The picture is painted beautifully. I can see the stars in the sky and the poor men trying to keep warm by staying close.

[Willard Wells]

Thank you so much for your kind words and reviewing my work.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Rather the sad true. I've once seen a homeless woman sheltering and sleeping in a doorway. She was drunk too, but I guess in such a situation she was drinking to forgett. Well done. :-) Rudi

[Willard Wells]

Some also think of drinking as a way to stay warm. In reality it just numbs the brain to the cold.read moreSome also think of drinking as a way to stay warm. In reality it just numbs the brain to the cold.
Thanks again Rudi for your time and review.

[Cherry Pepperweb]

That is a sad reality. Particularly in parts of the word where the nights are cold. There are social programs to help homeless but unfortunately not enough seek help. It's mainly illness that pushes them to the street.

[Willard Wells]

And beyond the cold they die from lack of food and excess drugs and alcohol. Thank you for your comments and review

[Cherry Pepperweb]

You're welcome. :)

[Entranced]

Why is it that i think you are going to continue writing this one, it does not feel right to end on a sad note like that..

[Willard Wells]

Well you know I have thoughts and write them down. Your thoughts I have to say do set my processor moving a little. I'll get back to you if I play with it. And thank you for liking it that much to want more. I am blessed. Peace Out.

[Willard Wells]

Well I know that was fast, but on review, death is final. If I every find more to this it will be before. A beginning and not trying to rewrite the inevitable. Haha But thanks for the thoughts.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A very good expose of a sad social indictment Willard. Several areas in the UK have tried to impose bye-laws criminilising rough sleeping. Thankfully they have been thwarted by a social backlash on Change.com! Many rough sleepers are suffering from a mental disorder, somewhere in the region of 80%

[Willard Wells]

John the mental condition of those in the homeless communities began with the mentally ill becoming housed in the prison system and then released. The world has an issue being ignored. Thank you for reading and commenting.

[JayceeC]

This one is okay.. I like the subject and image you convey, but I'm not in love with the repetition of the word night. Maybe " in cold winter's light" or something similar.

[Willard Wells]

Well you know how I am JC, I throw it on paper and then wait and from what you say I have waited long enough. Let me see if that works for me in some way. Thanks for the review.

[JayceeC]

Much better this way and not as many changes. I put a contest pie e up tonight.

[KWP]

reminds me of when I first traveled to Mumbai .. the plane from Sydney gets in at 2:00am and when you leave the airport the first thing you notice is the thousands of homeless asleep on the streets, covered in cardboard, or not covered at all.. not sure what they do in Monsoon season ...

your words tell it how it is ... facts only .. leaving the emotion to the reader ... well done X

[Willard Wells]

Thank you. I was surprised and very happy with it when complete, but a bit sad in the true I had put before myself. I appreciate your time and words.

[Perkele.7885]

You are getting so very much better at this type of poetry.
Once you were a child in the wilderness
now, the wilderness is just a neighborhood park to Williard Wells!

[Willard Wells]

I feel like I am short changing or taking the easy way by writing short verse like this. Oh well what comes out is what I put down. Thank you for your extreme praise and thank you so much.