Warm Honey

Morning Visit To Coffee Shop

Love is like warm honey

Slowly rolling

Off the end of your tongue

When you first

Feel your pulse

Your heart

Then the quickening

Of your breath

Smelling the scent

As it rises

You inhale

Feeling more excitement

Your heart is racing

Now she is close

Passing by

The brush of her

Arm against your thigh

 as she passes

You grasp the table

your espresso too

Before you fall down

You'll be back tomorrow

At the same time

another scent or a touch

Which is a lovely way to start your day

Reviews

[Asim Melajac]

I'm familiar with this feeling, someone sliding into your life and becoming that sweet part of your day, something you know you can count on to lift your spirit. Vividly told, simple and concise.. All in all, a sweet little poem! :)

[Willard Wells]

Thank you for reading and commenting. Just a fun little piece.

[Marie]

This sounds like a story of love found at Starbucks. I think of a croissant dripping with honey...

[Willard Wells]

Well that's kind of it, don't you think Marie. We spent so much time at Starbucks and so many other coffee shops. And yes the coffee shops hold special meaning to me. I like my croissant with chocolate. Thank you for reading and commenting.

[sereenaoutloud]

love the metaphor ..love is like honey...beautiful and sweet it is..although it can be a wee bit sticky sometimes as great love is worth the stings!!

[Willard Wells]

Yes love can be sticky, but the sweet sticky is worth it as you say. True love is worth the extra effort.Thank you for reading and commenting.

[Daydreamer]

"What do we have without love?" - absolutely nothing...This is a heartfelt poem filled with promise and of course- love..

[Willard Wells]

Thank you for reading and commenting. It is greatly appreciated.

[andrew mitchell]

A terrific write Willard and I suppose that's probably why we nick name our partners "Honey"

[Willard Wells]

Had not thought of it that way, but you may be onto something there. Thanks you for reading and commenting on my work.

[JayceeC]

Great job! I've gotten so used to the senryu and haiku that you have been writing that it's like looking at poems from a whole new writer. I like the play of the title and all it encompasses...the girl, the feeling, the imagery and metaphor. This is a warm, fuzzy feeling poem of attraction that is at once strong, and appreciation for the chance to be near.

[Willard Wells]

Thank you JC. I am working on new ways of writing and I seem to like it. Thank you for reading and commenting.

[JayceeC]

Looking at this piece I see something much more controlled and measured than your older writes. That may be a result of all the short form you've been writing. It forces you to choose words in a more concise way than before.

[Willard Wells]

You may be correct and I have been looking at more words differently. Mostly leaving out words that seem to be unneeded.

[JayceeC]

This tighter form seems to agree with you more. It's a bit more focused for your reader.

[Chirag Kumar]

Awesome poem Willard. You described the feeling of love in a brilliant way. Great :)

[Willard Wells]

Thank you kind sir and I appreciate you taking time to read and comment on my work.I am glad you enjoyed it.

[Perkele.7885]

Willard is becoming an author of substance right before my very eyes. Where I once felt you suffered from small bouts of apprehension, I am not feeling that from you lately. I am seeing you write one fine poem after another. You are becoming a fine writer or you always were and just did not know it.

[Willard Wells]

You are perceptive on bouts of apprehension. Nature of my brain function. I appreciate your kind words and reading my work. The issue is more that so much comes out of my head, but it is some times a challenge to sort the good stuff from the bad. My perception is limited. So you find friends help me out.

[Perkele.7885]

I am glad to help when I can

[AaronFreitas]

Man I have been there my friend. Not for a while but I still remember that feeling of nerves and anxiousness... heart pounding away why I put up my best poker face. Awesome write :)

[Willard Wells]

Thank you Aaron your words and reading my work is greatly appreciated.

[AaronFreitas]

Always buddy :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the poem. I like the way you described love.
"You'll be back tomorrow
At the same time
For another scent or a touch"
Would be a nice day to enjoy the taste of warm honey in your tea. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Willard Wells]

Thank you sir for your reading and commenting. It was the first honey line that came to me and I went from there and then as the end came I found another tag line. First one other than short work that has felt right for a few days. Again much appreciated.

[Coyote Poetry]

It worked. You create a outstanding poem and you are welcome.