Oh yes, the word tongue makes it all the more seductive and sensual. A brief encounter in a coffee shop.....I have written about them in the past. They can spark so many fantasies. The build up of passion is superb. I liked this one. Lydi**
Thank you Lydia, that is exactly why I changed it to tongue. My thought was always the same but litt.. read moreThank you Lydia, that is exactly why I changed it to tongue. My thought was always the same but little adjustments can give it a little extra bit. Thank you for reading and commenting on my work.
Ok I loved the tenor of this one very much. I disagree with your change from spoon to tongue as the latter gives the impression of a drooling moron with little social etiquette and no chance of getting the girl. Otherwise is is a well observed piece depicting the passing of a stranger who takes your attention. If I ever smell Opium perfume I am smitten, even on a horse!
Yes the change is still on my mind and not sure if it will change back or not. I have certain scents.. read moreYes the change is still on my mind and not sure if it will change back or not. I have certain scents I recall of woman in my past and certain ones hold strong within my mind, As for the drooling moron, I did not look at it that way, but then again many men do become drooling morons when some woman are near.
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And John thank you for reading and commenting.
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Yes we are drooling morons at times but please don't expose our weakness in verse! lol
Thank you so much for reading and commenting on my work. I really enjoyed this one. We all have a li.. read moreThank you so much for reading and commenting on my work. I really enjoyed this one. We all have a little passing romance at different times in our life. It keeps the blood flowing and the heart beating.
'Your tongue" works very well for me Willard. (hmm doesnt sound right now that I read it back) ...
The scene here is very well painted in words and I almost want to reach out as she passes and put in a good word for you but some fantasies are better off left as just that.
Someone can really make our day with a single smile or touch.
Nice one.
Anto, thank you for your kind words. I can tell you understood the write and I expect you have been .. read moreAnto, thank you for your kind words. I can tell you understood the write and I expect you have been there on occasion. Appreciate you taking time to read and review.
a java induced jostle with love... such a warm piece, Willard, and love is so like 'warm honey' ... you've captured love's affect on those falling... beautiful poetry!
FT thank you for your kind words. And man or woman, who has not been in a coffee shop and be impress.. read moreFT thank you for your kind words. And man or woman, who has not been in a coffee shop and be impressed by a beautiful person and the feeling start. Greatly appreciate the review.
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I agree, Willard... I know I fall in love at coffee chops all the time :)
It happens every day on many corners across this great country.Love is alive with a single cup of "J.. read moreIt happens every day on many corners across this great country.Love is alive with a single cup of "JOE". Thank you for viewing my work and commenting. I could not ask for more than a smile from you.
I have thought of a million comparisons for love. Somehow, this one seems to fit the best. Its perfect! i know what to answer now next time someone asks me what i think love is.
Thank you so much for your kind words and taking time to read and comment on my work. It is greatly .. read moreThank you so much for your kind words and taking time to read and comment on my work. It is greatly appreciated.
Photography and words are my activities to try and keep an over active mind under control. For the most part my pieces have been short since that's how I'm wired. I would like to write something longe.. more..