Insomniac??

Insomniac??

A Poem by Willard Wells
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Free form as I work out my energy

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Sometimes my yesterday's and todays become one


Sleep deprived 


Adrenaline flowing on a slow drip


It flows through my veins to my brain


Brings me to a point where I am still reasonably sane

© 2015 Willard Wells


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Willard Wells
Random free flow raw to me honest I hope. Scary, for some, but fun once you learn the ride.

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Gee
Hi Willard imho you could lose the"with no sleep in 2nd line as you've said that with the first two words,could be instead,"sleep deprived......." then onto 3rd line.

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Posted 9 Years Ago


Willard Wells

9 Years Ago

thanks for the suggestion and I will make that change. I have been trimming down my words, but this .. read more
"Adrenaline flowing on a slow drip" this is worded perfectly Willard. I needed my coffee on an I.V today lol
Thank your sharing this great write!!

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Willard Wells

9 Years Ago

I knew when I read your work that we were kindred spirits as they say. Thanks for visiting and comme.. read more
sereenaoutloud

9 Years Ago

lol yes "the not sleeping, coffee surviving kindred spirits !!" lol
thank you so much for th.. read more
I agree. It is very good and I love the picture. Wish I was there.

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Posted 9 Years Ago


Willard Wells

9 Years Ago

Glad you popped over to check it out. The picture is 18 miles south of San Francisco in the City of .. read more
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613
Boy, oh boy, can I relate to this one! I'm actually dealing with this as we speak - having been that I've barely slept the past two weeks. It's actually getting really frustrating. The only thing keeping me going is my daily dose of caffeine, writing & Law & Order: SVU, ironically.

As for the writing of the poem - well done. I could easily relate to it (as you can see above).

There were, however, two grammatical & punctuational errors: "today's" should be "todays" & "reasonable" should say "reasonably".

Overall, nicely done!

- Brittney

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Posted 9 Years Ago


Willard Wells

9 Years Ago

Boy am I tarty. thank you for your review. And thank for the corrections. I have been on fumes for d.. read more
613

9 Years Ago

You're welcome!
This is something I relate to greatly!! I struggle with insomnia myself, and you've managed to accurately put into words how it can feel. Sometimes my days and nights get blurred into one as well! However, I do favor the night because I seem to be more productive. Excellent work :)

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Posted 9 Years Ago


Willard Wells

9 Years Ago

Tina thank you. I knew in reading your piece that you would find something you liked and as luck wou.. read more
Tina

9 Years Ago

I shall check that out next! And you are not alone, I've quite warped views on things as well. :)

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Willard Wells
Willard Wells

Sacramento, CA



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Photography and words are my activities to try and keep an over active mind under control. For the most part my pieces have been short since that's how I'm wired. I would like to write something longe.. more..

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