The Sultan's Pride/Revised

Mulra was the Sultan's favorite harem girl, and she pleasured him as her loyal lions protected her.

~The Sultan's Pride~

(Revised)

 

 

Mulra was the Grand Sultan's fairest, sultry bride,

Considered by others as The High Master's pride.

At her side were lions, both trophies of his hand.

Felines, "Pleasure" and "Desire", were hers to command.

 

 

Each presented to her as gifts from her lover,

As she was favored by him, above all others.

His Harem held prized beauties from The Orient,

Yet, he deemed Mulra to be most magnificent.

 

 

She was clothed in gowns spun from the purest of gold,

And rarest of gems were hers to have and to hold.

In her smooth hand, was a mask used to tease and play

With "Pleasure" and "Desire" while enjoying the day.

 

 

She strolled the palace in aristocratic style,

As her treasured lions amused and invoked smiles.

Pleased, she responded with her soft clapping of hands.

While she enjoyed cool relief from harsh desert sands.

 

 

The Sultan ordered all wives to treat her with care,

For he prized her beauty as that beyond compare.

Wives pampered her for an evening of love with him,

Fragrant almond oils used as sweet balm for her skin.

 

 

The Sultan desired her behind sheer flowing silks,

Hungry for the honey from her full crimson lips.

He longed to hold her body closely in his bed,

As she fed his lust with kisses upon his head.

 

 

 

Mulra strolled majestically down long palace halls,

Awaiting his whim at his ever beck and call.

Her lions stood panting, stationed close by her side,

Hearing sounds of passion while safeguarding their pride.

 

 

 

Nights of romance ended as the morning light came.

Mulra would retreat to chambers where she'd remain.

"Pleasure" and "Desire" ever guarded his bride,

Emerald gilded mask always close by her side.

 

 

 

The Sultan dressed to attend matters of his day,

With thoughts of Mulra and her sultriest of ways.

He knew at night his passion for her would return,

As lust's wildfire would reignite and hotly burn.

 

 

 

Mulra relived her nights, feeling the Sultan's charm,

As "Pleasure" and "Desire" protected her from harm;

Ready to respond when her dear lover would call,

For long nights of passion behind sheer silken walls.

 

 

Sheila,

MS. Lady of Feline Love

Author's Note

The original version of this poem was posted as one of my first poems here on Writer's Cafe. As I have grown as a writer, I am attempting to revise and refine my writes. This is such an attempt.
And again, I thank Rick Puetter for his advice and assistance!

Reviews

[LisetteCanWrite!]

What a romantic and sensuous fantasy tale.. well spun with great rhythm and rhyme.. metaphorical that women can possess the beautiful power of each both on the outside and inside to aide them. The Sultan's truest desires and most magnificent lover.. very dreamy and lustful... that of which is the highest delights of most men's true desires deep down.. (not saying it's all they are or that they are beasts but surely physical intimacy is a huge thing to alot of men.. please don't kick me for saying it). This was fantastically written I felt there was more than just lust for this woman.. if she is sooo magnificient it must be deeper for him inside!

[Sophie]

You paint a vivid and beautiful picture with words. Its has a very sensual melody.
Its wonderful!

[R J Askew]

A fine yarn, very engaging. O to be a sultan! I wld have Mulra on the team sheet on a regular basis. But wld worry about the lions being in too close attendance.

[Serend1p1ty]

A great write.
Beautiful description, so consistent. A truly masterful piece.
One thing however, the rhythm is sometimes broken. Only happened a few times.
Otherwise, it was a joy to read!

Yours truly,
cloud6

[Rick Puetter]

Dear Sheila,

You know how much I loved the original version of this poem. In fact, it was one of the ones I immediately picked out as being amongst your best efforts. The revision of the poem is dazzling. Great stuff here. As others have commented, the story is magical and the male/female interplay is ever so perceptive. And then there is the metaphor of the lions. This is wonderful. And "Pleasure" and Desire" are rightly cast as powerful cats as they overpower the Sultan's entire being, captivating him at night and haunting him throughout his day.

This is getting my very highest rating. A stunning poem. Very well done!

Best regards,

Rick

[Georgia Gypsy]

This is a wonderful piece of soft passionate literature!! I never read the original, so i cant compare them....however i think this is absolutely wonderful!!
Great work!!

[Jason]

Ohh...how I have always enjoyed these artistic and educational poems of yours...something strictly unique to you and your style cuz. You make other writers like myself more and more encouraged everyday to keep chipping away at our creative nature no matter what. Excellent work.

[Tate Morgan]

You have indeed refined your work I must say as a man who favores the rhyme of melodic poems This is really good
taTE

[Fabian G. Franklin]

A rich and beautiful write steaming with the spice of the orient; adding flavor to the weary soul. So good to read your words of fantasy, love and adventure.

[cartera]

Not only mistress of the powerful Sultan but also mistress of the most powerful beasts of the jungle. Woman rules, O.K?
Well structured poem that moves along easily, but I felt the end abrupt; I felt as if the verses were setting me up for a tale. It was as if I had just had excellent starters but the main course did not come. I thought that she moved with hubris based on pride screaming, but then no tragedy here. Ah well.
Good stuff.
ATB
Alex.

[Bud]

Your writing skills have been nothing but robust, and superb. So, how does one improve upon that? Magnificence! And this is no different. You capture the reader's attention, taking them down a path of discovery. Picking their interest to find what the next line has to offer. Outstanding, as to be expected.