A Walk Through Hell

Human nature leads us to repeat past mistakes which may yield regret!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

At times we are our own worst enemy....this is my musing of self blame!

A Walk Through Hell

Drudged Hell's road again today,
Losing sight of my lifeline.
I slipped but then found the way,
Inspecting a former road sign.

In valley of tears mid woe,
Pathway found familiar grave.
Met old formidable foe,
From myself too much I gave.

Blotted sweat away from brow,
Though heat of fires is quenched not.
Soul's guilt clearly in full view,
Self-esteem wanes now to rot.

Agony from past looms o'er me yet.
Future rests on fragile thread.
Foolish acts birth deep regret.
Future joins now with the dead.

Shamed, my head I humbly bow.
Distraught I am, now sorely pained.
Flames burn sacrificial cow.
Much was ventured, nothing gained!

Sheila Bowyer Kline

Reviews

[J Harding]

Hey there,

I really like this piece, the power in the symbolism behind each line, indeed each word is huge. Each line has clearly been carefulyl thought out and deliberated on, and the rhyming allows it to flow beautifully despite being a reasonably slow tortured piece.

I particularly liked:"Self esteem wanes now to rot" but maybe that's purely because it struck a chord with me.

Excellent piece, well written and good choice of picture :)

[Ladysue]

wow, this is some emotional piece of writing. Brilliantly executed with an excellent message...BRAVO on this one!!!!!

[Jinx's Heart]

Deep emotions run through this piece. I feel so much as I read your lines and emotions surface as words and images fly through my head. Very well written.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is amazing. Some of the lines were so powerful. A poem you want to read again.
Coyote

[Mark]

Your skills as a writer have come so far in the eight months I have known you, Sheila. It just takes my breath away when I read such as this, though not for the obvious reason, that your pain and self-recrimination are so familiar to me. Those are familiar to ALL humankind, who have the courage to see and admit to them. No, your special gift is to make the intensely personal approachable to so many, and in such masterful form. Terse, yet flowing. SO happy this piece came my way!

[Lena M. P.]

Very potent write. We all have things in our past we wish we could bury but they only make us stronger. I enjoyed the poem as always.

[Valentine]

A deep thoughful write,,God bless..Valentine

[Tate Morgan]

Your best work as i have seen excellant
tate

[Fran Marie]

Pain from past looms o'er me yet

Future rests on fragile thread

Foolish acts birth deep regret

Future joins now with the dead


a powerful piece so very deeply expressed in both form and content

I especially liked the above verse~about the pain from the past ~ Great StuFF!!

[Jeff Miller]

Amazing. The message is amazing and it is expressed wonderfully. You can be your own worst enemy sometimes. Keep up the good work!

[Jason]

Wow....powerful. Very powerful... You put so much into this work of art that I believe each and every writer on this site could relate to. We are all our own worst enemy at times, and we all reflect quite often....ponder and dream. It is part of human nature, and so is the pain you captured with this. Oh dearest cuz....you never seize to amaze me. Congrats on another brilliant write!

Jay