My Father

A poem I wrote to my dad after a heated arguement. Doubt this crap's worth reading but might as well put it up on Writerscafe since everybody seems to like the stuff so much . . .

 

A man of esteem, a man on the rise.

A man of hope, and of sacrifice.

A man of relationships, a man of love.

A man of heart and a man of devotion.

A Righteous man, albeit a man with fault.

A man who understands, and a man who talks.

A man of the future, yet a man of the past.

A man of great courage, yet a man I call Dad.

We don’t see eye to eye, we hardly get along.

Yet with every sun rise, he welcomes me into his home.

A man of deserving pride, a man of great stature.

A man of service, and a man who tries.

A man of the Ages, yet a man I call Dad.

I know we hardly get along

I know we often disagree

But with every sunrise, I know

He’s a man who loves me.

 

Author's Note

~_~ Just another dose of emotional crap. I only care about reveiws when people read my books. I don't give a damn what you say about my poetry*

Updated. I cannot stand gramatical errors on so small a piece.

Reviews

[R E Tree]

I think like that about my mother sometimes we don't get on very well but in the end parents are parents they love you no matter what. I can't stand grammatical errors either I'm never good at punctuation or that kind of stuff so I never tell anyone off for it. Overall brilliant write and shows your love for your dad very strongly.

[QuietPoet]

I like this, very honest and true. Nice expression

[A.Lee]

Nice work on this. Nicely structured.

[Alextheperson]

The repetition really drove this piece home for me - I simply would not love this piece any other way. Bravo, good sir.

[Justin Street]

It's amazing, I only wish i can say the same about my father......maybe when i live with him I can love him again. really great, your father sounds like a best friend too. =)- justin

[Kandy]

I love it. It describes not only your father, but everyone else's fathers. I just think that repeating "A man of..." a lot is not necessary (we get it, he's a man). You also repeated "I call Dad" twice. Try not to repeat yourself too much. Then again, don't take my word for it. I'm not a professional poetry writer. Otherwise, it's very touching.

[Alicante lullaby]

wow.what a lovely tribute to your father.

[JENY]

Coming terms with dads and moms…
Is an art….
I too... am going through it…..
Often ….after many arguments….
I too reach at your conclusion….
That….
He is a man who loves me….

[The Analog Kid]

This is poignant. I have the same relationship with my Dad and my son with me...

[Ruth]

Emotional crap, hmm, well, emotions are always hard to execute but I love this, a job well done, resonates with me a lot, although I miss my dad for different reasons, this brings home that they should never be taken for granted:)

This is beautifully moving, excellent poem xx