Discontented

Finally NEW! Wrote when i was angry

Discontented

The words that drip from your lips
Sting and singe
Felt deep, the wound drains life along the pavement
Glutinous and radical
this life coats the footpath to my destruction

These words you sputter
Crush the psyche, destroy the persona
Scatter the fancy on a casual wind that travels on an accidental drift
These bitter monosyllables you cast my way
dismantle my foundations

Shattered like a crystalline chalice
My minds web no longer able to weave against the coercion
My written linguistics rippled back, a phantom of my inner hopes
Mutated, altered to fit your reproach

Separated thoughts from a mind not of my possession
Searching deep,
the ability to find some solace
away from the constant rigorous corroding of your spoken calligraphy
has fled along the distant breeze
of my forgotten animation.

 

Author's Note

Reviews are ALWAYS welcome. Working hard to improve my poetry

Reviews

[Lyrical Love]

Separated thoughts from a mind not of my possession
Searching deep,
the ability to find some solace
away from the constant rigorous corroding of your spoken calligraphy
has fled along the distant breeze
of my forgotten animation.

Your selection/choice of words is always excellent!

[AC Cheatwood]

My written linguistics rippled back, a phantom of my inner hopes
One of my favorite lines in this. Like others before me have said, you do paint a wonderful picture with your words. That is one thing I'm trying to do, and you seem to be able to do it effortlessly.

[Encore]

I like your word choice. It really sets a descriptive tone.

[Brianna Brie]

The words that drip from your lips
Sting and singe
Felt deep, the wound drains life along the pavement
Glutinous and radical
this life coats the footpath to my destruction

Nice descriptive pictures you paint with your words. Well done!

[deathcabxcutiex]

hmmmm. interesting. still digesting.

but favorite lines:
"this life coats the footpath to my destruction"
"These bitter monosyllables you cast my way dismantle my foundations"

[fireblossom]

constant rigorous corroding of your spoken calligraphy lol

I like this poem partly because of the word pictures you paint using the meaning of the words themselves.

Speaking to a person who uses monosyllables using multisyllabic words is precious. It adds a level of biting sarcasm.

Nicely done.