Sister Companions

Old. I used this in an audition for Arts High School last year.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Sister Companions

 

Pencil and paper

My writing silences the crowd

My words shake the foundations that the simple minded hold dear

A world so passioned and spirited about nothing yet everything

When the humans howl like beasts, and the beasts walk like man

A mixed up world of society’s mishaps and mistakes dressed up like dolls to paint a picture

When my words are spoken to the silent crowd a tear spills from a woman’s eye

A tear for loss, a tear for gain, and a tear for how the world has fallen

It moves me, and causes me to ponder

Are my words too much, or to little

Does my passion and soul just travel through their ears and drone in their brain like a life stealing cancer?

And soon I find myself crying

Unable to utter another word

The crowd shouts and boo’s but my eyes are unmoving

Focused on the site before me

We stand, companions, in this monotonous hell together

Sisters with our tears
In a sea of thousands

 

Reviews

[Mike L. Smyth]

oh my goodness Steffi, i have to say that this is probably one of the best poems/stories i have ever read...it sums up so much i just a few line. i love your simile about the the dolls painting pictures...this is really well done. truley. very good

[Lea Jane]

Wow, this is an amazing poem! I absolutely adored it, and the imagery was so beautiful.
This line was my favorite:
"When the humans howl like beasts, and the beasts walk like man"

Fantastic! I can't wait to read more of your work. :]

[Melanie Jane Boicourt S..]

I would have never booed you and I probably would have been crying right along with you!
Thank you for sharing.
Love All, Mejasha

[JC Fox]

This is a heart wrenching and beautiful poem, I loved the serenity of it. Great job

[J-Boo]

Wow, I found this poem very moving. You express perfectly how many people feel but have a hard time putting into words. And yet you aren't specific - which I guess is why so many people can relate!

To one of the previous posters - I interpreted the 'sisterhood' as referring to the author and the woman in the audience who shed a tear, not to all writers everywhere. Maybe I'm wrong?

[Joseph - Michael]

That was really out of oridinary prose poem I've read in a while. You're expressed on how most of the writers can feel every once in a while pretty well

Anyway, it's all good and just wondering; You've mentioned about the sisterhood of the writers, but what about the brotherhood as well? Hey, that's just me. Other than that, it's still all good here...

[Poeticpiers]

A most descriptive piece of prose. I think most writers can share your feelings. Only feedback can tell us if we are improving in our work . Nor the Oh yeah great from friends. But honrsr comments from other writers we respect