Pyro

Written at 1 am in the morning when i couldnt get to sleep and there was a show on tv about pyro's @_@

Pyro

Burn
The flames engulf
The warmth scatters
Golden tails of orange and black lick the night
Charred remains
Crumpled dregs
Smoke, like curling waves of hair
Deep ravens twisting in the night

Burn
Brighten the night
Singe the Earth with a smear on her Face 

 

Reviews

[Ottilie]

what are dregs? i like and gives a nice picture

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Umm... may I ask a quetion? What's pyro? No... seriously.

I can totally relate to staying up really late and coming up with great ideas. As for the poem... I really liked it. You painted a beautiful picture for the audience. I loved the metaphors and the personification. I uhh... noticed a pattern... or is it just a concidence? Lines 2-7. I really liked your style. The poem flowed very well!

[Victor]

This poem is really great! i love how it gets thwe image in your mind like your actually there seeing it happen! Great Job!

[Cylis Derrens]

Excellent write. It encourages me to write one of my own.

[Mary Balfanz]

Good job of painting an image for the reader.

[Eliza Valentine]

Word use and imagery is awesome here.... really love this piece, well done!!!!

[Melanie Jane Boicourt S..]

Again your word use is so good. I loved this line
"Golden tails of orange and black lick the night"
Wonderful!
Love All, Mejasha

[stipe]

i like

[Brianna Brie]

Superb write. I like this one a lot. Your word usage brings the flames alive.

[The Elder Pine]

I think you are in my honest opinion one of the best poets in regards to creating images. The name of about three or four poets on wc come to mind that can do what you have the ability to do. I think you have a gift to create, a real adeptness at stirring the juices of feeling inside a person. Excellent job once again.