Deep Time

A new paradigm.

Strangely accentuated colors filter down the swirling mists. I lay watching the pines that cling to steepled sides of granite, their conical spires appearing as ghostly battlements in a shroud of mossy spider web. Brush strokes paint the sky in hooks and half-circles; long winnowing lines all forming patterns with unsettling purpose of motion.

I am a burgeoning thought growing in the heart of deep time; a simulacrum of human action. My thoughts are not yours. I do not wish to share in your pain. It is a massed horror your society partakes in, without reason, without even the seed of animus. Your motion continues as a train full of the dead, fueled by the despair and impotence of centuries. The bosom of silence seals me; the resonance of pulse slowly, rhythmically washing on ocean shores where purple twilight forever colors the mind.

Reviews

[Laura Lynn]

I like the idea of putting all the people one does not have to be in cahoots with in a category of deadness if they are not on the same page. It is as it should be that our thoughts, I mean that people do not think the same things at once or we would become jinxed all. That was jinx, to say the same thing at the same time.

[Alan B.]

Very insightful review Laura. I like that you see it in your own way and have your own interpretation. Thank you for reading.

[Chadvonswan]

I read this and some of your other stories. This one was great. The prose flowed in an organic kinda way. If that makes sense..Great write man

[Alan B.]

Thank you for reading kind sir. I'm in the process of reading your work and you have a unique voice.

[Chadvonswan]

As do you. Its rare to find really good writers on here who don't solely write gay poetry, haha. But you really got some good writings on here

[Su' Nacnetaf]

Wouldn't call it a paradigm, yet maybe I don't fully understand what you were inferring. I sense this more like a statement of sorts, food for thought perhaps. Good job, keep on writing.

[Alan B.]

Thank you very much for taking the time to read and comment. I really appreciate any feedback I get. What I really meant was a new thought paradigm, but you cant take any way you wish.

[Su' Nacnetaf]

I think you could write very interesting plots for short stories and poems, this was, different, but made me think of that, you and I, sir, I believe we share a world perspective a bit. Or maybe I'm just wrong, who knows? I'm always fascinated with what I find here from time to time, especially from new writers.

[Alan B.]

I'm glad it appealed to you as being different. With my writing I try to peel back the illusions everyone shares and get, slowly to the truth, even if the truth is horrible.