The pain of true love

the life of a troubled couple

 She was amazing the eye of my life but i also forgot to tell her.i lied.

i didnt just love her. i was in love with everything she was and could ever be.but if only you could see the kind of life i would lead if she were stil here.but its time for me to shed my last tear. and even tho i once felt on top its time for me to take my nasty drop and then i will be at the botom.beaten and broken and i wil soon be forgoton

Reviews

[Lloyd Frieson-Small]

I can definitely relate to what this poem was about, though you could have done a little better conveying the emotions you felt. Good write, keep growing.

[Marie Salerno]

I think you have a free, unique style to your writing. I figure the grammar etc. is part of that. No rules. Your writing captures the raw, real feel of true love. "i didn't just love her " .. I think that's my favorite line in your poem. It is so honest & what so many fail to recognize - to love is different than to be in love. You captured it. I think your free style, verse - is well suited to your writing. Good write.

[WrittenStarts]

A bit of a grammar and spelling problem here and there, but very good and emotional!

[That1Nerd23]

I like your flow. You just let your feelings drive the pen. I can appreciate that. You did a great job with this! (:

[realmwriter]

I can atribute the grammatical and spelling errors to your writing style, however I do not know what that style is. There are servreal mistakes that need correcting, that aside this is good man, not bad at all.