Sour

Yet another poem about my beloved.

I can't remember a time
Where my love was not alive
She is the sparkle of my eyes
The only one whom I do not despise
I cannot say what I feel
Because I know it won't be real
For I cannot express the feelings I know
And nothing will ever be enough to show
Her lips have always tasted so sweet
As she has never been away from me
But here now, as I count the hours
I realize her lips have never tasted this sour

Author's Note

Tell me how this made you feel!

Reviews

[Jamestown]

You definitely have a unique style to your work, I enjoyed reading this
it's well thought out and penned, the sweet to sour shows emotions
being revealed almost as a new enlightenment and not necessarily
a good one:( Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Sir_Lansonlot]

Made me feel like I was 16 at my old ex-girlfriend's house sitting around watching some stupid show that I don't remember. I remember knowing that it was just stupid love and that there was no real subsistence in our relationship. What can I say? Dumb kids doing dumb things. It was beautiful and horrible all-together.

[the writer of woe]

That's sad. I hope you find a good relationship or have one right now.

[ANTO]

Hi Writer of Woe (coolest moniker ever by the way!) - I would drop the comma - it looks so out of place

"For I cannot express the feelings I know
And nothing will ever be enough to show " - words fail us often - language is limited but feelings arent so the frustration is palpable in these lines. So many will relate to these truths - though they may seem personal - they are actually universal.

The bitterness at the end is the frustration focussed into a pinpoint like the light of a laser and really packs a punch.

well penned WoW (so cool that name!!)

[the writer of woe]

Thanks a lot! This is the most helpful review I've gotten so far. I'll be sure to edit it!

[ANTO]

glad if I could assist WOW. - never grows old that username - brilliant - xDD

[the writer of woe]

Thanks lol :)