Shadows

Life is controlled by shadows ghosts of the dark. Out of night into light some of them flee.

Some become me.

Reviews

[Rob Santana]

This is cool man!! Short pieces alway pack a punch.

[Tomahawk Joe]

Thank you glad you enjoyed it.

[Brianna Brie]

I like this one especially the ending. Perhaps you would do well with Haiku's, Senryu's, and Tanka's since they are short quips of poetry in form. They are based on a syllable count per line. One thing for sure though, you have a flare for capturing the heart of poetry. Keep writing!

[Tomahawk Joe]

thank you for the review

[SteveB]

I like the image and like the concept but somehow for me at least the total is not equal to the sum of the parts.
Perhaps if you had line breaks so that each bit became a separate thought rather than three sentences of prose? For example a break after "shadows" another after "dark" another after "night" thn "light" then "flee" with the last line intact.

You keep the same words but by breaking it up you emphasize the points more.

An intriquing concept and I look forward to reading more of your work.

[allura]

i like the idea of this piece, I feel that you could have gone further with it.