Elusive skin

Elusive skin wearing thin though some will never break it in. It always seems to find the souls who kick it full of callous holes. It rests on shoulders of the vain while those in shadows never gain.

Reviews

[Brianna Brie]

I like the content. I had to stop and ponder it. Great rhyme scheme, too.

[Tomahawk Joe]

thank you for your kind review

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

The concept of this is quite interesting. I like the idea of "elusive skin", which seems soft, juxtaposed with the image of "callous holes". Lots of good stuff in this one. I would, however, love to see this in a more linear format:

Elusive skin
wearing thin
though some
will never break
it in.

---or

Elusive skin, wearing thin,
though some will never
break it in.

Something like that. Just a format thing that would improve the flow and the way it looks on the page. Overall, enjoyable and thought provoking.

[Tomahawk Joe]

Thank you for the review, I've never written much poetry so I don't know much about it.