Your

Your

A Poem by Aly

Your memory was something I held on too.
I fell so hard and fast when I met you.

Your smile was wine
Your eyes were toxic

I thought your dreams were the same as mine

I can't love you
But I always will

I wish you could have been mine
The more I gave
The less you gave back

You had healed me
But you also bruised me

I can't love you
But I always will

© 2013 Aly


Author's Note

Aly
inspired by J and the song "Poison and Wine by The Civil Wars"

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Amazing poem, emotion is relatable. You should message me sometime. Your J reminds me along of mine.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Yet another poem that has great emotion. although it was short, it did an amazing job. Bravo

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aly

11 Years Ago

thank you
your smile was wine, your eyes were toxic :D
xD this is such a deliciously creative stanza

I like how much this J character inspires your life and amazing song.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aly

11 Years Ago

thank you :)
Hmm...I will have to listen to that song. You have written a simple but deep poem here. The pain of loving but knowing you can't love someone is a sharp one. While the heart may want what it wants... the head says to us "major screw up ahead!". Good job Aly!"

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aly

11 Years Ago

thank you :)
I think that this is one of your best...Deep yet simple..not an easy thing to achieve

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aly

11 Years Ago

thank you :)
A fine poem!

Posted 11 Years Ago


I'm not usually a fan of repetition in poetry but I really liked the use of it here, and I think it added to the fact that you love him, but cant at the same time. Really nice kind of...oh, how do you say it...duality here, being in love and then not as well.

great job!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aly

11 Years Ago

thank you :)
you really have a diverse range of musical tastes and it is reflected in your poetry. this was good, almost toxic in itself. it is a double edged sword, the love, n'est pas? very good!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Aly

11 Years Ago

Thank you :)
quinfinn

11 Years Ago

you're welcome!

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