Four Words

How could you lie? 

How could you break my heart with four words. 

Four words I believed were true.

But were only a lie. 

Four words to end a friendship that took time to build. 

Four words for me to never see you again. 

Four words I hope I never hear or experience again. 

Four words. 

That's all it took.

Four words broke my trust. 

Four words stole that good image of you. 

Four words showed who you really are.

Reviews

[Leigh]

This a great and sad what I'd call a 'dialogue poem' and having read the comments I found what the 4 words were, but they could have been a lot of things that might add up to the same outcome, like :

I don't love you

I am leaving you

I'm seeing someone else

I'm emigrating to Australia

And so on

[Aly]

Right well. I'm in High School so...no one is married haha.

[Leigh]

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[Britt]

I know exactly what you're going through. i've been there, done that & it sucks!

[Aly]

thanks

[InsanityWriter]

I loved the repetition. :) Awesome write!

[Aly]

:)

[Lucy Morningstar &heart..]

that was intense and awesome and wow...just...you're an awesome poet, aly!

[Aly]

thank you! :)
Much appericated.

[KeeD]

I only figured out the 4 words from the comment section and that was disappointing for me :( I was really expecting the phrase to be revealed in the poem, since the title was so leaning on them but none the less the structure and the piece was really good.

[Aly]

Thank you. Well I didn't really want to say what the "four words" were. So yes. But you know even though the four words might not be that great. If you listened to the whole story. You'd understand.

[KeeD]

I did understand, but you know when you really want to be rewarded with something at the end :D like a kid, hearing grandma sent money in the mail but it got lost, I'm gonna be sad because even though it's the thought that counts i still expected that reward :D such were these 4 words, anyways good write Aly < 3

[Aly]

thank you :)

[Muse]

I was thinking I'd find a quote..written with just four words. lol

So the question remains..what were those "4" words??

[Aly]

sigh....it's a long unbearable story...but...it was " I have a girlfriend"

[Muse]

wow okay..she as pretty as you?

[quinfinn]

coulda been worse....."i have a wife"

[Muse]

um already feeling awkward. I plead the fifth.

[Aly]

Well....he doesn't really have one....I asked this guy on a date and he told me had one but really he doesn't so....yeah.....then this poem was born...haha.

[KeeD]

well his loss, cause if he doesn't even have one then he must be stupid.

[Mir]

I loved how you kept repeating the title! It really made reading it more...hmm...I wanna say intense but I don't if that would be the right word. Oh well I'll use it. It made it more intense. It was a very simple but direct poem. And the way you ended it kind of justified your whole point of writing it. Great job! :)

[Aly]

thank you! Well those "four words" we're my main focus, glad you enjoyed it Best Friend!! :)

[Carolann Dowsett]

This is great, so simple yet carries such impact. I hope you are ok though, sounds like someone has let you down badly. Another great poem Aly.

[Aly]

thanks Carolann glad you liked it.

[AYVID N]

I love the way you write. All hurt all anger so well encapsulated in 'Four words'.
I relate to this very well. Thank you for sharing.

[Aly]

Thank you :) much appericated. So glad you continue to read my writing. Thank you for reading and reviewing.

[Michael Stevens]

I'm sorry you went through this, but here's 2 words that should cheer you; excellent poem!

[Aly]

thank you :) glad you enjoyed it.

[Michael Stevens]

You're quite welcome!