Girl, Greed, Promise Lies

about a girl caught in the crossfire of a war and has taken her loved one away and left her with lies

 

So young is the girl

That cries in the street

Who lays her head

Over a puddle of blood and dust on the concrete

 

Chaos surrounds her

Inside is a fire

Burning of eternal brightness 

Rising, feelings scorched and in a blur

 

Who needs them?  

 

Her lover is gone

With the setting sun

Hence the promise of a new day

And a renewed chance to love

 

She cradles his head

Looks into his eyes

Past their glassy death

And into his soul

 

Praying….

 

Could it be

That in times of need

Everything once meant to be

Is lost in the sea of dreams?   

 

War rages on

Started long ago

From lines long fallen

Though no end is near 

 

How long will this continue

How many more will die 

One more causality added to the pile  

 

Stolen by greed

Sanctioned by promise

 

Lies…. 

Author's Note

another poem that doesn't always rhyme o don't critique on that. what do you say

Reviews

[Dredd]

you have a way with words... truly a gift.

[Lunare]

"Stolen by greed...Sanctioned by promise" This line struck me. Stolen by the greed that bought on the war that killed the girl's lover...war's are things of greed and hate to be certain. My heart ached upon reading the line about the girl craddling her lovers head and gazing into his glassy eyes. It also sends shivers down my spine. amazing indeed! I would have thought that you experienced this yourself...so much emotion in so little wording. Shows the work of an acomplished poet. I look forward to reviewing more of your writing in the future

[DanaRegen]

I like that, "enternal brightness" luscious and fresh is this poem. Not all poems have to ryme but I think your doing fine! Keep up the good poetry!

[Bella]

I agree. This poem is very moving and thought provoking. My favorite part was:
"Chaos surrounds her
Inside is a fire
Burning of eternal brightness
Rising, feelings scorched and in a blur"

[The Reticent Receptioni..]

this is so...tangible. moving. thought provoking. great work.

[Hanan_Maliah]

your write is something I find very real and I thank you for allowing me the privilege to read your work...I understand this feeling...these words...and can appreciate the "truth" hid behind so many lies...