Metastasizing Was Too Many Syllables

A Villanelle about the beauty and horror of breasts.

They aren’t the plastic breasts Daddy buys you at sixteen.

Her creamy flesh molds in my hand

The scar below her right n****e makes them perfect.

 

She’ll ask why I don’t wish they were bigger

I can’t stand thinking of someone cutting them open.

They aren’t the plastic breasts Daddy buys you at sixteen.

 

Each makes a perfect pillow when I sleep.

I open my eyes to pink peaks.

The scar below her right n****e makes them perfect.

 

Hanging them in my face when she mounts me.

They lay pressed against her chest after orgasm.

They aren’t the plastic breasts Daddy buys you at sixteen.

 

I kiss the crooked flaw

when she lets me after we make love.

The scar below her right n****e makes them perfect.

 

Each month her lumps grew tender,

my soft tongue couldn’t dull the pain.

They weren’t the plastic breasts Daddy bought you at sixteen.

The scar below her right n****e made them perfect.

Reviews

[eli mercuree rue]

i dont usually write
reviews this to the point
but
there is no reason to make this long
and drawn out
so im just gonna say it





wow..



and suddently a scar makes sense

im confused over the daddy part where to take and if im thinking to much on it
hmm
what would a daddy give at 16..
i'll leave that to my head to get trapped in

i agree with the other reviewers ect...

[Angel's Lady]

You paint a very vivid picture and tell a familiar tale extremely well. I loved the repeated lines, too. Great write.

[Kate]

Villanelles and their evil coconspirator the Sestina are far from easy to write well. You, however, seem to have no difficulty using the form to your advantage. Thumbs for that.

[Seriana]

Dang, that was awesome. I really like it. I'm guessing is was about breast cancer?
That was a very raw, yet real way to word the poem. I liked it very much.

[Poeticpiers]

perfect form but highly original content Recognition that flaws can make something appear more perfect is not an easy skill to aquire