The Fall of the Aliens

I sat on a hill

And watched an alien species fight

Down in a valley below,

With their great machines

And tiny infantry.

I saw lazer beams

Being fired.

I heard explosions

Of missles and bombs.

And I heard screams

Of those now dead.

 

I sat on a hill

And watched this great battle

Of a war long fought

A war

That would be the last.

 

As I sat on a hill

I wondered how this war started.

Was it a dispute over religon,

A fight over territory,

Or was simply just a war

For no reason at all.

 

I sat on a hill

And enjoyed the show.

I watched the final battle

Of this alien species

That lasted a for thousands of years

And accomplished great things.

 

I sat on the hill

And watched the fall of all Mankind.

 

Author's Note

If you are still confused, it was from an alien prospective and he was watching the final battle of the human species.

Please note, this is not a comment on any war, current or otherwise. It is just a poem.

Reviews

[bluessadmood]

but how can it be just a poem i knew right away ,it was mocking our intelligence,that alien he saw us fighting for thousands of years ,for purpose of land money love and i could site a hundred more different reasons,and you are right out of seeing such stupidity for long we come to enjoy and rejoice i seeing them fight,for its nice to some jokers at a play at a dance strange dance,the dance of death,wonderful,i liked the way you made an alien look at us wide eyed and just can not make out whats going on,for i think in his community he has never seen such stupidity...

[Flame DM]

Mankind is truely stupid. And we are aliens to other aliens. Not gonna lie, had a feeling it was us when I was beginning to read this and jumped with joy when i found out. We are destructive beasts and you captured the stupid reasons we fight very well. Religion? Its meant for peace and something to believe in yet we fight for it. Money, meant to show that we work hard for somethign to obtain another item to better us, yet we get greedy and fight over it. technology, meant for us to broaden our minds and we create weapons. everything we have around us we just...we really are stupid.

amazin poem. They're funny short and brings a bigger message over all!

-Flame

[Philosophile. (Maddy)]

Great perspective with this! The twist at the end had me reread it. I think this was well written, but I believe the last line of the 4th stanaza should instead mock the accomplishments of our battles. What have we accomplished? Your perspective from above makes the fighters below look like ants. Good job with this!

[Kiddx]

I sat on the hill
And watched the fall of all Mankind.

I like how you sum up your writes, you writes have some meaning to them well the ones i have read, this is wonderful. You seem to be very creative.

[Bella22]

Well written as always!

I like this poem. The way that it is from a perspective of an unbiased being makes it easier to see the overall picture of the world. The beauty and accomplishments that could have been thwarted by trivial things we convice ourselves we must fight over.
Wish there were more to it though, more discriptions and thoughts from the alien.

[daftinklings]

It is really confusing. I understand from your note what perspective you were writing from, but I think the point of writing a poem is to get something across, not to have to write explanations in order for readers to understand it.

Plus, the alien sounds too human. He's sitting on a "hill", and that just sounds really human.

[Renee J.P.]

Wow. I really like this. Very well written.