He wept

This is another poem for school that I based of the short verse in the bible.

 

 

He wept,

                We don’t need to

Know how he wept,

                All that matters is that he wept,

For you and me

                For our sins

He wept.

Author's Note

I'm open to any ideas and comments.

Reviews

[Carrie Ott]

Wow. Awesome. Short, lovely, and to the point. It's a good way to get attention for a poem - people expect the poetry to be longer, and when it isn't, they pause to actually consider the little they've read before reading it again. So, by making it short, sometimes you can actually catch the reader's attention more! Yet, you've said all that needs to be said. And this poem relates to one of my favorite parts of Scripture - when Christ asked that the cup be passed from him, yet not of his will but his Father's. Your poem paints that stark picture that even God can cry - for us. The last two words - simple. Catching. "He wept." Perfect ending, leaving people thinking. Not to mention the setup of the poem catches attention.
Oh, and sorry, but when I give a review I give a long one, generally. I can't help myself :) It's the analytical poet in me :) I love English.