What IF

Hatred being so deeply digging its roots in d society and environmental issues becoming so much disastrous have we ever given a thought about it???

What if...derz a lonely planet

wat if jst hate dat travels

wat if no miles 2 go

wat if no smiles 2 show

wat if d barns dsnt grw

wat if no drops 2 flow

wat if jst lonely in crowd

wat if no luv 2 show

wat if no parents r der

wat if u trapped in a snare

wat if u gt ol alone

wat if ur frenz r gone

lyfz alwayz more den jst dare

make it happy n lift it upto dere

luv ur parents who hv alwayz cared

n frenz will b by ur side

wen trapped in a snare....

Author's Note

This is my very first post so I would appreciate your thoughtful comments...
thank u

Reviews

[Linear]

It's really quite beautiful, though I'm no fan of gutter english, still the thoughts flowed through .....
:O)

[Black]

if you worked on your language
it would be a great poem ,
or if its ment that way,
i dont know, it could be both

Great job though

Regards Black

[stars are far]

this is so nice i loved this ..
great work :)

[dieuxsansculte]

The language doesn't hold me, but the message does.

"wat if no luv 2 show"

It would be a sad and lonely world, indeed.

Not my style, but good writing nonetheless. Truth has no need for a particular style to be true.