Is this worth continuing...?

Story about a rough, janitor of sorts in Dallas...and Sunshine Cleaning effectively ruined this premise.

 I'm part of what's called the Cleanup Crew. We go to all of the most horrific crime scenes, when someone's been offed or hurt pretty bad. After the fatass cops and detective types take their pictures and grap evidence, and after the morgue guys or ambulance or what have you comes, we go with a power washer, a bucket of water, and some rags, and we get the place scene looking nice- ready for for a picnic or children playing or whatever the f**k.
  Basically, we're middle-school janitors, only instead of some snotnosed f*****g kid spitting at us, it's a man in uniform. And since I'm not a skirt or a f*g, I don't get off to some has-been b*****d with a gun in his belt to make up for a life lost and a tiny c**k spitting flecks of hot coffee in my face. So I'm not going to pretty this up for you. It's a s****y job, cleaning up brains and blood all day. In a big city like Dallas, it's a busy job, too. I work all day, come home and try and wash the blood off of my hands. After ten minutes, I give up, call for some food to be delivered to my apartment, jerk myself off while wishing I had a skirt to do it for me, eat, and lay down on my waterbed thinking about the way my life's gone. I get up way too goddamn early, and do it all over again.
  My phone rang interrupting my thoughts- which was good. Thinking too much f***s me up, and you can't have a nutcase cleaning up what used to be people.

Reviews

[HoorayForUnderdog]

You could go in many different directions with this so keep writing. Maybe while cleaning up one of the crime scenes the janitor will begin to criticize the perps for their lack of creativity in the murder scene and begin a murderous rampage himself but this time with flair...sort of a dark comedy...feel free to consider this plot idea a gift to you to use as you like. You definitely have the tone set for a rough janitor type :)

[Richard John Davis]

I would love to read bloated and stretched diatribes about ur life. Something that touches reality once in a while. I think that makes a good story. When reality is mixed in there or you're such a person as to spend entirely too much time researching thinks. My opinion only and I am a very lazy guy.

[Richard John Davis]

Look forward t reading more.

[Lynx]

I find it sad that you didn't. This is really worth continuing, the character feels solid. The situation feels brilliant. There are a lot of "Ah I hate my life" type stories but they're more often like the guy in "Wanted" where he's got an office job. Never this way. Please come back?

[Drew Wade]

I have to tell you, this is so ridiculous in a good way. the main guy is impossibly hard nosed and bitter, you almost have to continue it to do him justice. yes, I would say it's worth it, just for the entertainment value alone. haha.

[__Flaw__]

And why not. But the way your story goes, it might just end up in a pool of decomposed brain-stew rather than in any ones library. If u'd ask me why, then well, i might not answer it a 100% accurate as i am myself taking a piss on my writeups, every now and then, haha...but yeah, u just need to insert a few sentences in there that would lead to some future sky scrapper. Like right now i just see a man babbling about his job and being a bit frustrated and s**t like that, but there are no future hints, wishes, or past regrets.. . just too much present.
Anyways, that was me babbling like your janitor of sorts... so do carry on. And yes we are so damn frustrated, ain't no skirt that's for sure...hehe:)))

[Peteypie]

wow i really liked it. like my brain is already trying to figure out like what way this story can go. You give the charecter extreme voice. I would think that he becomes like affected by crime scenes that continously become more grousome and he undergoes a change. either nuts or sort of clarified. i thoroughly enjoyed dark comedey and i would love for you to make me darkly laugh some more.

so YES this is worth continuing.

[Somebody you've already..]

great write and i too think its to short and you should make it into a novel or even a book.

[abejoyal]

This is a great start and could make a wonderful story. The voice of the main character is extremely effective, and I would really like to see a short story, if not a novella or even a book come out of this.

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This is a pretty good idea. Some of the concepts will need more detail, but i'm sure you were going to add that. I would read this story; it is an unexplored section of crime scenes.