Ilies Fire

Old girlfriend that got me writing with her own free verse

ilie knows the sirens song

ilie knows where men's hearts go wrong

they want,they need

they love,they seed

they stay,they leave

ilie questions,now what about me

I look,i seek

im strong,not meek

I find,i care

I want to spare

the hurt,the pain

the fire,the flame

to those I sought

to him I thought

I couldn't be caught

alas,not true

the truth it hurts

the pain it blurts

a sad lament

the times been spent

now her heart awaits

anothers gait

Author's Note

My 1st written for her only.It worked pretty well,she attacked me passionately.

Reviews

[Tony Jordan]

The staccato thrum of this one could signify the beating heart or time ticking away for ilies.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i agree with Keegan....the coming together of you and her created the poetry seed in you...even with her gone...you have words to raise on your own.

nicely dramatic and the movement of this helps the feel of the piece...free verse with a clear beat.

[KeeD]

I loved this, it's so well worded and showers with it an experience of lessons in love, hurt, loss and gain. You might have lost a teacher, a lover but you did gain a talent, a gift and i'm sure you had it within you all along but here's to Ilie's encouragement in sharing you with the world, I for one am grateful I get to read you.

[Angie G]

Exquisite piece.. Happy writing!

[Mirror]

Ha! Wow!!!!!!.......I am in love all over again....

[Coyote Poetry]

I did like this poem. You create the face and life of a siren. I believe the siren are worthwhile muses. I liked the old fashion feel of your words. Honest, direct and true. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote